1. Posted: December 17, 2020In:

    Convinced by prominent comedians that marriage will make him funnier, a struggling comic takes their joke seriously and elopes only to find his bride wants a marriage so peaceful that in order to find the comedy in it, he’ll have to up his game.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    There is a lot of setup, as others have pointed out. You have boiled the entire movie into a few words. He’ll have to up his game. As in? Become a complete bastard? Become the world’s best husband?

    There is a lot of setup, as others have pointed out. You have boiled the entire movie into a few words.

    He’ll have to up his game.

    As in? Become a complete bastard? Become the world’s best husband?

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  2. Posted: November 22, 2020In:

    To relive his childhood, a mentally ill writer decided to bring his 1950s sitcom to life by pitching it his script to executives.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Tell us the effect he is hoping to achieve? Relive his past by having a show made don’t really connect. The story isn’t hanging together.

    Tell us the effect he is hoping to achieve?

    Relive his past by having a show made don’t really connect. The story isn’t hanging together.

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  3. Posted: November 25, 2020In:

    A civilian operative writes an AI app that guarantees facial recognition. The app also turns the phone in your pocket into a targeting sensor. Is he willing to kill to protect us all from social media?

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    We are lost in Act1. A man searches for the person trying to kill him. That is what we have in story. Everything else is decoration. What is the story about?

    We are lost in Act1.

    A man searches for the person trying to kill him.

    That is what we have in story. Everything else is decoration. What is the story about?

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