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When a Goth Detective is tasked with solving a murder at a very optimistic circus, he must solve the case to be able to escape the happiness.
I like this. It's obvious the goal is to solve the case. A lot of potential plot twists and character development in this...in my opinion. You will also need an antagonist who's trying to hinder the investigation somehow.
I like this. It’s obvious the goal is to solve the case. A lot of potential plot twists and character development in this…in my opinion. You will also need an antagonist who’s trying to hinder the investigation somehow.
See lessWhen a Goth Detective is tasked with solving a murder at a very optimistic circus, he must solve the case to be able to escape the happiness.
I'm thinking maybe you don't need the word "optimistic." ?It sounds like you are trying to contrast a "goth" mentality with a cheerful one. I think the audience will know that circus people are overly happy while performing...but, you could also include something in the story that shows how circus pRead more
I’m thinking maybe you don’t need the word “optimistic.” ?It sounds like you are trying to contrast a “goth” mentality with a cheerful one. I think the audience will know that circus people are overly happy while performing…but, you could also include something in the story that shows how circus people may act differently (not so happy) off-stage (not something for the logline…but for the story).
See lessWhen a Goth Detective is tasked with solving a murder at a very optimistic circus, he must solve the case to be able to escape the happiness.
What do you mean by an optimistic circus?
What do you mean by an optimistic circus?
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