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A lawsuit for his wife?s injury offers a homeless group leader a ticket out? until a member of his flock threatens to testify. Now he must resort to extreme measure to stop him.
"When a leader of a group takes a stand for a woman in his flock he is forced to re-examine his values in?cruel, merciless world of the homeless in which some fall all the way to the bottom, while?a few struggle?to retain some remnants of human dignity."The incident does not have a clear connectionRead more
“When a leader of a group takes a stand for a woman in his flock he is forced to re-examine his values in?cruel, merciless world of the homeless in which some fall all the way to the bottom, while?a few struggle?to retain some remnants of human dignity.”
The incident does not have a clear connection to being “forced to re-examine his values”. Aside from the fact that that is vague, it needs to have a clear connection to the inciting incident.
The logline should answer these questions:
Who is the protagonist? Which yours does.
What is ?his goal? Yours does not answer this clearly. An objective goal. Does he want to be able to have a house again? Does he want to kill someone? Does he want to stop someone from dying? Does he need to find medicine for someone who is sick? Define a clear goal, that the inciting incident sparks.
What does he do in order to achieve his goal? Does he find himself a good job in order to pay for a house? Does he try to get a loan? Does he get a gun and track down someone to kill? Does he go on a journey in the wilderness to find an ancient cure?
Define the goal and the action the protagonist takes to reach it, and you have your logline.
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A lawsuit for his wife?s injury offers a homeless group leader a ticket out? until a member of his flock threatens to testify. Now he must resort to extreme measure to stop him.
Well, yes, for the logline focusing on one character may be beneficial. But if they all have the same objective goal, then the logline could go without a focus character. I suppose Avengers is a bad example because it's established the characters before and such, but anyway, the logline wouldn't beRead more
Well, yes, for the logline focusing on one character may be beneficial. But if they all have the same objective goal, then the logline could go without a focus character. I suppose Avengers is a bad example because it’s established the characters before and such, but anyway, the logline wouldn’t be “After an agent dies, Tony Stark must stop Loki…” Because the focus isn’t on Stark(though Stark and Cap probably have the most screentime between the two of them). A better one that includes all of the characters would be something like, “After an agent is killed, six superheroes must come together to stop Loki…” That’s all I meant, really.
See lessNow, if one character is really the inciting character, say framing Nick Fury as the protagonist, “When a ?threat arises, Nick Fury must get six superheroes to come together to stop the threat. ”
I suppose it really just depends on the story.
A lawsuit for his wife?s injury offers a homeless group leader a ticket out? until a member of his flock threatens to testify. Now he must resort to extreme measure to stop him.
"you need a lead character and the lead character must want something" In this case I disagree, while maybe for a new writer tackling a story with no lead may prove to be challenging.(and I don't know torgodog's experience, so no comment there) But at least this idea leads itself to not really focusRead more
“you need a lead character and the lead character must want something”
See lessIn this case I disagree, while maybe for a new writer tackling a story with no lead may prove to be challenging.(and I don’t know torgodog’s experience, so no comment there) But at least this idea leads itself to not really focus more on one character. The story is specifically about the interaction between all the characters, so focusing on one character would put the other characters(like I said before, possibly diverse characters) in smaller roles. The film would end up being more about the MC’s relationships with the others, as opposed to giving all the conflicts equal time to develop.
That’s my opinion, anyway.