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  1. Posted: September 4, 2016In: Action

    When his twin brother is murdered, a law student discovers that he was moonlighting as a vigilante; donning his brother’s mask, he takes on the criminal underworld to hunt down his brother’s killers.

    Dkpough1 Uberwriter
    Added an answer on September 4, 2016 at 9:51 am

    Is this for a series? Anyway, the post is a bit too long. Also, is there a specific enemy? My example:?When a law student discovers that his twin brother was murdered because he was a vigilante, he must take on his mantle and bring his killer to justice. (~28 words) I suggest possibly finding a diffRead more

    Is this for a series?

    Anyway, the post is a bit too long. Also, is there a specific enemy?

    My example:?When a law student discovers that his twin brother was murdered because he was a vigilante, he must take on his mantle and bring his killer to justice. (~28 words)

    I suggest possibly finding a different description than law student; tell us something about his character, an adjective. Shy, obnoxious, etc. Preferably something that may be an obstacle to his goal. ?And, does he actually have any skills that would allow him to become a vigilante? Presumably, his brother had been doing it for a while, and was adept at fighting, or using whatever tools he used. What about the brother? An easy solution would be that they both took martial arts classes when they were younger, and he still practices.
    Take, for example,?Daredevil on Netflix. Matt Murdock was trained by a master martial artist, and now he just uses those skills to be a vigilante. Even then, he takes a beating. So, all I’m saying is to make sure it’s believable that this kid could take on crime.
    And, speaking of?Daredevil, I suggest changing the law student so as not to draw too many comparisons. ?Maybe medical? That would mean he has knowledge of the body and is able to even more efficiently take people down using medical knowledge.

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  2. Posted: August 24, 2016In: Drama

    A good father and respected police officer is prisoned after he accidentally shot a young child, who was in the driving away robber?s car. He is trying to get his life back with a support of citizens of his city.

    Dkpough1 Uberwriter
    Added an answer on August 26, 2016 at 8:33 am

    Even though by now it doesn't really matter, I'm not exactly sure about your points. The point of my posts was that cops can shoot whomever they please and then get a paid vacation, they have very little accountability these days. Of course, there are those who are convicted, and those who do go toRead more

    Even though by now it doesn’t really matter, I’m not exactly sure about your points. The point of my posts was that cops can shoot whomever they please and then get a paid vacation, they have very little accountability these days. Of course, there are those who are convicted, and those who do go to trial, ?but the vast majority of cases do not end that way.
    Mainly, I’m not sure where you got ?” innocent cops, just trying to do their job with decency and fairness, ?(and they do exist, lots of them) ?should not be condemned or punished for the crimes of the bad ones.” because the only thing I said was that cops who DO kill someone should be held accountable.

    I’m not completely sure how you mean it’s going against common perception. I mean, a cop pursued a criminal, accidentally kills a child, and then is imprisoned for it. Perhaps a bit unfairly? Depends on how harsh the sentence is, but I see nothing that really does what you say.

    And yes, what country is it?

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  3. Posted: August 24, 2016In: Drama

    A good father and respected police officer is prisoned after he accidentally shot a young child, who was in the driving away robber?s car. He is trying to get his life back with a support of citizens of his city.

    Dkpough1 Uberwriter
    Added an answer on August 25, 2016 at 11:00 am

    "Perhaps you find that outcome unbelievable. I don?t " Unbelievable? No. But based on the real world, unlikely. Of course it depends on his reputation, the people indicting him, etc. So if maybe the cop were a frequent troublemaker or something, it would be more likely. It is something that no produRead more

    “Perhaps you find that outcome unbelievable. I don?t “
    Unbelievable? No. But based on the real world, unlikely. Of course it depends on his reputation, the people indicting him, etc. So if maybe the cop were a frequent troublemaker or something, it would be more likely. It is something that no producer would probably be hung up about, either. After all, ?it is Hollywood, not exactly known for accurate depictions.
    However, if Snail chooses to tackle this issue, it would turn the story into something reflects and comments on the problems America has with its police force.
    Problems such the militarization of the force, leading to the overuse of SWAT teams, time and resources police ineffectively use on things such the War on Drugs(it’s sole purpose, to decrease the use of drugs, has failed miserably. and those resources could be used to rehabilitate rather than criminalize), prostitution among other things.
    And, of course, the number of pets police kill.?
    Anyway, police should be held accountable for when their actions, especially when they kill someone they’re supposed to protect. This story doesn’t really seem to touch on that, the cop kills the child who is in a moving vehicle, and he didn’t even know the kid was in it.?

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