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Following a near-death experience, a down to earth cop discovers a secret society of astral travelers are manipulating major events in the physical world and works to prevent an imminent attack he suspects they are planning.
I find that most SciFi, especially action oriented ones, lack a compelling, interesting antagonist. The writer gets so lost in trying to explore this world they've created that they just throw in a mustache-twirling bad guy or gal for the protagonist to defeat. Like Foxtrot mentioned, what is the anRead more
I find that most SciFi, especially action oriented ones, lack a compelling, interesting antagonist. The writer gets so lost in trying to explore this world they’ve created that they just throw in a mustache-twirling bad guy or gal for the protagonist to defeat.
Like Foxtrot mentioned, what is the antagonist’s goal? What is motivating them? How do they challenge the protagonist? Is there a main antagonist, a Darth Vader to this group, someone who leads or whoever is the most compelling? Perhaps it’s someone the protagonist knows.
Something I do is to make a logline from the perspective of the antagonist. Or at least I write down their goal and think through the motivation. The audience doesn’t need to agree with what the antagonist(or protagonist for that matter) is doing, but they should understand?why.
Here’s an example using some elements from your concept but making up my own story:?After discovering a secret society of astral projecting terrorists, a humble cop trapped in the astral plane must learn to affect the physical world so he can prevent their next attack. (31)
I tried to include my suggestions. I hope this helps.
See lessFollowing a near-death experience, a down to earth cop discovers a secret society of astral travelers are manipulating major events in the physical world and works to prevent an imminent attack he suspects they are planning.
"Following a near-death experience, a down to earth cop discovers a secret society of astral travelers are manipulating major events in the physical world and works to prevent an imminent attack he suspects they are planning." How does a near-death experience relate to him discover this society? DoeRead more
“Following a near-death experience, a down to earth cop discovers a secret society of astral travelers are manipulating major events in the physical world and works to prevent an imminent attack he suspects they are planning.”
How does a near-death experience relate to him discover this society? Does he himself become an astral projector and run into this group? If not, then how would he fight against them? Does this group cause his near-death experience? If so, describe it more specifically.
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What's the conflict? Story is conflict. It's good for a movie character to have an inner conflict, but a logline should only describe the external conflict. What is his objective goal?
What’s the conflict? Story is conflict. It’s good for a movie character to have an inner conflict, but a logline should only describe the external conflict. What is his objective goal?
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