“When she is targeted by a rival tech firm for software code in her head, a closed off data courier with a photographic memory must finish her latest delivery to survive. Only problem: For some reason, she can?t remember ever accepting the job.” (43 words)

This logline tries to include a lot. ?What is the information most important to the plot? And how does her finishing her delivery stop people from trying to kill her? Unless the software in her head is what she’s delivering? While the ending may be an important plot device, how does it affect the logline?

For example:?After she is attacked by mercenaries, a reclusive data courier must deliver the software code in her head before a rival tech firm can get it. (26)

Now, after all of that. What does set this apart from other movies with similar premises? What is the hook of this concept?

I hope this helps.

IMDb doesn’t usually list loglines, but blurbs. Blurbs are meant to convince an audience to watch a product. A logline is used to sell a script to a movie maker. Study the Formula tab at the top of the page for the general structure. A logline should convey the plot, the main character, and it should have some element that hooks the movie maker into wanting to read the script.
I suggest not looking at this other film. I suggest doing what you want with your story, because otherwise it will look like a ripoff. An homage is one thing, but you should distance yourself from Frailty, not keep going back to it.
In order to become more familiar with loglines, I suggest looking at and reviewing other people’s posts. Can you identify what’s wrong and why? Doing this means you understand it better. Especially take a look at the Examples, try to find loglines of films or television shows you’ve seen so you can even better understand how the elements of the logline work.