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It?s the tail-end of the hair band era, but four friends from Jersey don?t know that yet, and their band is riding the wave of a surprise hit single. All that stands between them and their dreams of gold and platinum are a cross-country road-trip to L.A., strange venues, hostile audiences, and a label suit with an axe to grind, hellbent on seeing them fail.
solidjim:This is your 5th iteration of the ?premise of a struggling band. ?So I'm guessing the premise has a strong appeal to you; there's some emotional bait that has got you hooked. ?What ?is it? ?What do you feel is the emotional hook in this story? ?What do you feel your story has to offer thatRead more
solidjim:
This is your 5th iteration of the ?premise of a struggling band. ?So I’m guessing the premise has a strong appeal to you; there’s some emotional bait that has got you hooked. ?What ?is it? ?What do you feel is the emotional hook in this story? ?What do you feel your story has to offer that would make for a ?new twist on the all-too familiar subject of bands and performers trying to breakthrough in a cut-throat business?
See less?A cop and his K-9 companion unintentionally hijack a billion dollar drug shipment from a ruthless cartel that will stop at nothing to get it back.
Your story seems to have a lot of moving parts, too many (obviously) to fit into a logline.So let's try the KISS approach (Keep It Simple Screenwriter). Every good logline needs to have a hook a feature that immediately (immediately as in a few words) grabs the reader's attention, makes him want toRead more
Your story seems to have a lot of moving parts, too many (obviously) to fit into a logline.
So let’s try the KISS approach (Keep It Simple Screenwriter). Every good logline needs to have a hook a feature that immediately (immediately as in a few words) grabs the reader’s attention, makes him want to know more — more than can be summarized in a logline. ?In other words, makes him want to read the script — the primary goal of a logline.
So what do you conceive to be the hook in this story?
See less?A cop and his K-9 companion unintentionally hijack a billion dollar drug shipment from a ruthless cartel that will stop at nothing to get it back.
Come to think about it, as one who has been involved in drug seizures, I have to wonder about the time line. ?It's standard procedure for contraband to be transported to the police station and booked into property ASAP. ? ASAP ?meaning with all deliberate speed, ?within an hour or two after the seizRead more
Come to think about it, as one who has been involved in drug seizures, I have to wonder about the time line. ?It’s standard procedure for contraband to be transported to the police station and booked into property ASAP. ? ASAP ?meaning with all deliberate speed, ?within an hour or two after the seizure. To prevent just the scenario the logline outlines.
But if the cop has no intention of turning in the drugs, then Dkpough1 raises legitimate questions as to the integrity of the cop, his qualifications for being an admirable protagonist, one an audience would root for.
fwiw
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