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When a witch who is also a medical doctor is left with three days to raise his daughter from the dead, he enlists the help of an ameteur witch who has three days to save her mother from a deadly disease.
Why would the warlock call upon an?amateur? ? ? Why doesn't he solicit the help of a pro? And if the protagonist is the warlock, he seems to be completely helpless, utterly dependent on an amateur, who, in any event,?has a more immediate and personal problem than helping the warlock. ?Other than begRead more
Why would the warlock call upon an?amateur? ? ? Why doesn’t he solicit the help of a pro?
And if the protagonist is the warlock, he seems to be completely helpless, utterly dependent on an amateur, who, in any event,?has a more immediate and personal problem than helping the warlock. ?Other than beg the witch to help him raise his daughter even if it kills her mother –but why would the witch want to risk the life of her mother by taking the time to help the warlock? ?What’s in it for the amateur witch?
Who is the real protagonist here, the warlock or the witch?
Whatever, the motivational math just doesn’t add up for me.
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See lessA middle-aged writer who fears his dreams of fame may never come notices obscure fabrications in the nonfiction works of a famous author (think Malcolm Gladwell in stature) and publishes a series of scathing corrections, which attract increasing attention and lead him to commit his own questionable acts in pursuit of fame.
At 57 words the logline is too long and lays out too much information, almost the ?entire story arc, which is unnecessary. ?All that's needed are a few basic elements. ?These elements are discussed under "Training" at the top of the web page.And is he merely struggling, or is a more congruent characRead more
At 57 words the logline is too long and lays out too much information, almost the ?entire story arc, which is unnecessary. ?All that’s needed are a few basic elements. ?These elements are discussed under “Training” at the top of the web page.
And is he merely struggling, or is a more congruent character trait ?in relation to the story arc that he’s ambitious which leads him to overreach? ?IOW: what is his character flaw that leads to his downfall?
See lessWhen a graffiti outbreak in a small town corresponds with recent child abductions in the county, a nerdy teenage boy has to crack the codes to save the children and become the town hero.
I agree that, as a general rule --but not an, inflexible, inviolate one -- an inciting incident should hit "close to home". ?[But more importantly, the 1st 10 pages must open in a way that grabs attention.] ?In this case, it seems to me the wording of the logline would depend on where writer intendsRead more
I agree that, as a general rule –but not an, inflexible, inviolate one — an inciting incident should hit “close to home”. ?[But more importantly, the 1st 10 pages must open in a way that grabs attention.] ?
In this case, it seems to me the wording of the logline would depend on where writer intends the emphasis to be in the inciting incident. ?And what is the teen’s character flaw.
Is the teen’s action motivated as a result of the abduction hitting close to home, when a loved one disappears — and then the graffiti comes to his attention? ?If so, ?what character flaw does the inciting incident attack that he must overcome to solve the case?
Or is the teen absorbed in his own world and thoughts, indifferent to the abductions going on around him, but (character reversal) ?gets involved when it dawns on him that the graffiti is not a coincidence? He has to overcome his character flaw, introverted self-absorption, to solve the mystery.
I can see the plot being kicked off in several ways, a testament, I think, to the viability of the overall premise.
Back to what has become Question #1 for me for every logline I read: ?what is the hook? ?The case to be solved or the character who solves it, who realizes the abductions and graffiti are related? ?For me, it’s the latter.?
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