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  1. Posted: May 15, 2018In: Superhero

    The Lord living under an alias tries to reconcile with his estranged daughter who is a member of SWAT, but kills to police officers in self defense and not only finds himself at war with a brutal police force, but his daughter and now the salvation of humanity hangs in the balance.

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    Added an answer on May 17, 2018 at 1:53 am

    >>> fix the tech issues?Such as?The fundamental problem I have is that the premise of a JC who fights back rather than turn the other cheek is both a story hook -- and a story obstacle. It's an obstacle because it is diabolically and diametrically opposite to everything known and believed aRead more

    >>> fix the tech issues?
    Such as?

    The fundamental problem I have is that the premise of a JC who fights back rather than turn the other cheek is both a story hook — and a story obstacle. It’s an obstacle because it is diabolically and diametrically opposite to everything known and believed about the religious figure.? The question dangling over the logline that goes begging for an answer is: WHY?? Why is he this way?? Why is a man who preached? — and practiced –non-violence acting violently?? (Why do you want to portray him that way?? Other than exploiting JC with a provocative twist to his character and teachings, what’s your point?)

    And even? if I get past that obstacle, I still don’t get a connection between the the conflict and the stakes? It’s not logically obvious why all humanity gets in the crossfire of JC’s private war with the fuzz – -why their lives are at risk.

    fwiw

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  2. Posted: May 14, 2018In: SciFi

    Jesus Christ living under an alias is brutalized by two police officers and decides to fight back bringing him face to face with his estranged daughter a sergeant in SWAT. Their confrontation will decide whether humanity lives or dies.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on May 15, 2018 at 6:25 am

    A provocative and perplexing premise. I'm not sure it's a marketable one.And I don't see how the very survival of humanity is at stake.? It's JC vs the Cops. How does everyone else get caught in the cross-fire?? Why must everyone else get caught up in the altercation?And since the genre is describedRead more

    A provocative and perplexing premise. I’m not sure it’s a marketable one.

    And I don’t see how the very survival of humanity is at stake.? It’s JC vs the Cops. How does everyone else get caught in the cross-fire?? Why must everyone else get caught up in the altercation?

    And since the genre is described as Sci-Fi, it is a JC living in an alternate universe?

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  3. Posted: May 11, 2018In: SciFi

    Upon successful human cloning, the mother and the Military of USA destroy the Earth, to redefine ?Mankind? and ?Humanity? on a recreated Earth.

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    Added an answer on May 12, 2018 at 7:09 am

    As variable said.?And if she's biologically enhanced, can kill with her mind, I don't see how her brother poses a serious threat.? She can stop him with merely a thought. Given her powers, the threat of his taking her children doesn't seem to be credible.

    As variable said.?

    And if she’s biologically enhanced, can kill with her mind, I don’t see how her brother poses a serious threat.? She can stop him with merely a thought. Given her powers, the threat of his taking her children doesn’t seem to be credible.

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