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When a misguided and socially frustrated young Muslim is manipulated online by a violent female imposter this nerve-shredding urban drama constructs a series of events that entwines the stringent crimes of some of modern societies most deviant personalities.
As Richiev said.? The industry standard is to compose the logline from the point of view of the protagonist. And in this instance, "... a series of events...."? is general, uninformative.? We have no idea what the protagonist's objective goal becomes as a result of being manipulated. Indeed as curreRead more
As Richiev said.? The industry standard is to compose the logline from the point of view of the protagonist.
And in this instance, “… a series of events….”? is general, uninformative.? We have no idea what the protagonist’s objective goal becomes as a result of being manipulated. Indeed as currently framed, the main character is more puppet than protagonist, more acted upon than acting.? For better or worse, a protagonist must be proactive, not reactive, not responding to the actions and influences of others.
Consult? the “Our formula” link at the top of the web page for the guidelines for writing an industry standard logline.
See lessA burnt-out detective has to face his past when offered the job of finding two missing kids in a small-town full of lies.
A logline is about what a protagonist must do facing forward in time.? What his objective goal is looking towards the future.? A logline is not about unresolved issues from his past.Certainly in the process of moving forward, a protagonist may have to face issues from his past.? And such issues canRead more
A logline is about what a protagonist must do facing forward in time.? What his objective goal is looking towards the future.? A logline is not about unresolved issues from his past.
Certainly in the process of moving forward, a protagonist may have to face issues from his past.? And such issues can enrichen the script proper.? But a logline is about the intended objective goal going forward (cause), not about issues that come up unintentionally from the past (effect).
A logline is about intentionality, about intended actions,? not unintended consequences.? The burnt-out detective does not intentionally, deliberately, willfully seek to face issues from his past.? That is not what he originally wants to do, that is not his original objective goal.? ?What he wants to do, what constitutes his conscious intention is to find the missing kids.? ?Having to deal with his past comes as an unwelcome, unsought after surprise.
See lessAfter a drunken hookup at a work party, an ad-exec realizes that he is in love with his ?work wife.? He must decide whether to profess his feelings or keep their relationship as is before she moves out of state with her boyfriend.
As variable said, deciding is one moment in the plot.? A logline is a concise statement about all the moments in the plot.? What the logline needs to tell us is not his dramatic dilemma (deciding whether to decide), but the choice he makes. As a result of the situation what does he actually do?? SpeRead more
As variable said, deciding is one moment in the plot.? A logline is a concise statement about all the moments in the plot.? What the logline needs to tell us is not his dramatic dilemma (deciding whether to decide), but the choice he makes.
As a result of the situation what does he actually do?? Specifically, what becomes his objective goal?
Check out “Our formula” at the top of the web page for guidelines on how to formulate an industry acceptable logline.
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