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An opinionated former cult-member must convince his equally-opinionated family to leave the same cult before they commit the ultimate sacrifice – themselves. TITLE: Born to Die
At 22 words, the logline is succinct.? But, alas, it lacks an inciting incident.? What has happened that makes it a matter of? life-or-death NOW that he must convince his family to leave the cult? (For that matter, why did he leave?? Why isn't he still deluded like his family? Have you worked that oRead more
At 22 words, the logline is succinct.? But, alas, it lacks an inciting incident.? What has happened that makes it a matter of? life-or-death NOW that he must convince his family to leave the cult?
(For that matter, why did he leave?? Why isn’t he still deluded like his family? Have you worked that out?? That’s not an essential aspect for the purpose of the logline, but I suggest it is an essential aspect of the protagonist’s character in the script.? And I am frankly curious because in my foolish and emotionally vulnerable youth I came under the influence of a religious cult. And? I have mulled over a lot why the arguments that brought me to my senses failed to persuade others..? Which is why I think? “opinionated” misses the mark in describing the family.? The problem with the family is that they are deluded.)
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See lessOver a psychotherapy session, a man with failing marriage and too much history starts falling in love with his female therapist and must be stopped or she’d lose her license
I don't see a story hook that differentiates this from? other stories about patients who fall in love with their therapists.?The logline is about a problem in therapy,? transference, that is older than Sigmund Freud, although he was one of the first to diagnose the problem.??Therapists are warned abRead more
I don’t see a story hook that differentiates this from? other stories about patients who fall in love with their therapists.?The logline is about a problem in therapy,? transference, that is older than Sigmund Freud, although he was one of the first to diagnose the problem.??Therapists are warned about this situation while in training and given instructions on how to handle it.
And furthermore, her license is in jeopardy only if she reciprocates, if she feels the same way toward him.? ?As long as it’s one-sided, she’s not in danger of losing her professional standing.
See lessWhile training a new intelligent human specie, a scientist discovers their origin to be alien. He must lead an intelligence team to erase them before they emerge as emperors to human-intelligence.
If the new species has the potential to emerge as the dominant species, it seems to me they sure as heck don't need training from? an inferior species like us. Rather, we need to be trained by them.A logline should raise one and only question in the mind of a reader:? will the protagonist achieve hiRead more
If the new species has the potential to emerge as the dominant species, it seems to me they sure as heck don’t need training from? an inferior species like us. Rather, we need to be trained by them.
A logline should raise one and only question in the mind of a reader:? will the protagonist achieve his objective goal?? But this logline pre-empts that question with the introductory phrase? “While training a new intelligent human specie”.
WTF?
Where/how did this new species come to be?? Until I have the answer to that question my mind can’t move on to focus on the rest of the logline and the only question a logline should raise.
It seems you have at least two films here:? 1] the origin story of the? ultra-intelligent species; 2] The inter-species war that results.? ?IOW:? a hairless ape version of the? “The Planet of the Apes” franchise.
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