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When a military-trained biologist’s husband unexpectedly returns alive from a secret mission, she must go on a quest to a mysterious lighthouse to save his life – and the world.
I just don't see the logical, causal connection between his return and her need to go to the lighthouse, how the former triggers the need to do the latter.However, what if she's told he's MIA -- missing in action --- on a secret mission, then her objective goal is to find him, or find out what happeRead more
I just don’t see the logical, causal connection between his return and her need to go to the lighthouse, how the former triggers the need to do the latter.
However, what if she’s told he’s MIA — missing in action — on a secret mission, then her objective goal is to find him, or find out what happened to him.? She has more personal and urgent stakes in going on a quest… that leads to the lighthouse.
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See lessRevision #2: When given the choice of reliving his life, a deceased high-flyer is told by a sagely corpse in order to do so he must correct three past mistakes before his funeral in 48 hours or risk being trapped in Limbo forever.
As usual, Richiev's review and suggestions are spot on.However, I don't think>>recall a single moment from his life that defined him before his funeraladequately addresses Richiev's suggestions.? That phrase seems rather vague, nonspecific.And even after he remembers one such moment, so what??Read more
As usual, Richiev’s review and suggestions are spot on.
However, I don’t think
>>recall a single moment from his life that defined him before his funeral
adequately addresses Richiev’s suggestions.? That phrase seems rather vague, nonspecific.
And even after he remembers one such moment, so what?? What difference will it make in how he lives his life going forward?? Isn’t the more important issue what must he DO about what he remembers?
See lessRevision: Trapped into a lease with his ex-wife, a depressed writer must navigate the intricacies of single life, but when he falls for his married boss, life gets so much more complicated.
The logline gives the protagonist a problem and a major complication but it fails to give him a dramatic objective goal. Given the problem, given the complication what must he do?? What becomes his objective goal?
The logline gives the protagonist a problem and a major complication but it fails to give him a dramatic objective goal.
Given the problem, given the complication what must he do?? What becomes his objective goal?
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