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  1. Posted: March 14, 2018In: Drama

    After a lovesick flight attendant and the wife of a doppelganger of a famous actor becomes pregnant by him, he sets out to convince them to share a home with him.

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    Added an answer on March 18, 2018 at 9:01 am

    My comments reflect my concerns as to the marketability of the concept in light of the ongoing debates over the roles offered women in front of and behind the camera.

    My comments reflect my concerns as to the marketability of the concept in light of the ongoing debates over the roles offered women in front of and behind the camera.

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  2. Posted: March 15, 2018In: Adventure

    After a crazed general conquers the mystical rainmakers, a bullied boy must raise a rebellion to defeat him, before another ?Noah?s? flood wipes out humanity.

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    Added an answer on March 16, 2018 at 5:42 am

    Richiev? offers a good enhancement.? ?When your story hook is magic -- as it is in this case -- it has to be? kept central to the working out of the dramatic problem.? It should not be tossed to the periphery as it seems to be in version 1.0 of the logline in which the kid saves the day with nary aRead more

    Richiev? offers a good enhancement.? ?When your story hook is magic — as it is in this case — it has to be? kept central to the working out of the dramatic problem.? It should not be tossed to the periphery as it seems to be in version 1.0 of the logline in which the kid saves the day with nary a word about doing it with any magic.

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  3. Posted: March 14, 2018In: Drama

    After a lovesick flight attendant and the wife of a doppelganger of a famous actor becomes pregnant by him, he sets out to convince them to share a home with him.

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    Added an answer on March 16, 2018 at 4:45 am

    >>>?A doppelganger of a famous actor impregnates both his ill gotten gain fan and his wife and convinces them to share a home together with him.?End of story.? FADE TO CREDIT SCROLL.? I mean, from the guy's pov, problem solved, mission accomplished -- right?? What else is there to dramatizeRead more

    >>>?A doppelganger of a famous actor impregnates both his ill gotten gain fan and his wife and convinces them to share a home together with him.?

    End of story.? FADE TO CREDIT SCROLL.? I mean, from the guy’s pov, problem solved, mission accomplished — right?? What else is there to dramatize?

    If the denouement of the plot is that he does convince the women to co-habitate, then this version is a spoiler:? it gives away how the movie ends.? And that is something a logline should never do.

    I’m guessing there’s more to the plot than that.? But I don’t know what you have in mind; there are so many possibilities.

    A logline should lay out a dramatic problem that becomes a source of escalating conflict, that? is not resolved until the end of the movie.? What is that dramatic problem in this story?

    Also, I do not find the man a relatable, sympathetic protagonist.? He’s trading on his looks, not his character. And it doesn’t ring emotionally true to me that in these modern times, either woman would agree to such a convenient arrangement — because it’s only convenient for him.? What’s in it (emotionally) for the women?? Certainly not love.

    And then there’s this:

    >>> for personal moral reasons, [he] decides against abortion

    Whoa! I have to call a time out and throw a penalty flag on this.? Why is he the one who makes the decision?? Shouldn’t the woman decide for herself?

    Frankly, this seems to be the kind of movie plot that women in the “Times Up” movement are railing against,? one with a story line that treats women as little more than sex objects, that casts them in servile roles subordinate to the sex drive , narcissism and dictates of male protagonists.? A concept that seems doomed to fail the Bechdel test from the git go.

    fwiw

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