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When an black high school football star mysteriously disappears, his four friends and their dog set out to find him, discovering that things are much more sinister than they seem.
>>>>?discovering that things are much more sinister than they seemIt goes without saying that the protagonist always starts out on his struggle underestimating the risks involved, the jeopardy, the psychological and physical price he will eventually discover he has to pay to succeed.? ThRead more
>>>>?discovering that things are much more sinister than they seem
It goes without saying that the protagonist always starts out on his struggle underestimating the risks involved, the jeopardy, the psychological and physical price he will eventually discover he has to pay to succeed.? That’s part of the essential nature of drama, most particularly stories? belong to the action, thriller, adventure genres.
So it isn’t necessary to say what goes without saying.
See lessIn a dystopian future, when reaching ‘working age,’ teenage rebel defys his destiny set by a leading class oppressors and will fight for living life his own way, even if it means death.
JanCabal:>>>Does it have all other ingredients?The antagonist needs to be specific. "Leading class oppressors" is general. And by specific I mean there needs to be an alpha "class oppressor" who dominates and personifies the whole system.? As in "The Hunger Games".? Katniss Everdeen is fighRead more
JanCabal:
>>>Does it have all other ingredients?
The antagonist needs to be specific. “Leading class oppressors” is general. And by specific I mean there needs to be an alpha “class oppressor” who dominates and personifies the whole system.? As in “The Hunger Games”.? Katniss Everdeen is fighting? the oppressive regime of Panam, but the specific person she is fighting against is President Snow.? He is the face of Panem; he is her nemesis. Who is the face of your “class oppressors”?? Who is your protagonist’s nemesis?
LIkewise the protagonist’s objective goal needs to be made specific and concrete.? “Will fight for living life his own way” can mean anything and everything.? How does “his own way” translate into a distinct objective goal?
>>>something I am passionate about
If you are passionate enough to write the script, you are hooked on the premise.? Great!? Now the? challenge is to hook the rest of us on your premise so that we will want to read the script, see the film.
fwiw
See lessIn a dystopian future, when reaching ‘working age,’ teenage rebel defys his destiny set by a leading class oppressors and will fight for living life his own way, even if it means death.
This reads like a generic kids-flipping-the-finger-and-rebelling-against-repressive-adult-authority trope of the coming of age genre.? What this logline lacks, what it needs, is a particular hook, a specific and unique take on the trope. As was the the case, for example, with the "Hunger Games" andRead more
This reads like a generic kids-flipping-the-finger-and-rebelling-against-repressive-adult-authority trope of the coming of age genre.? What this logline lacks, what it needs, is a particular hook, a specific and unique take on the trope. As was the the case, for example, with the “Hunger Games” and “Divergent” franchises, for instance, both set in dystopian futures.
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