1. Posted: September 4, 2017In:

    A disillusioned crusader returns home to find wife in danger of losing her soul.

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    >>>in danger of losing her soul.Film is a visual medium. ?Which means that every element in a logline should invoke a visual image in the mind's eye of a logline reader. What's the visual for "in danger of losing her soul"? ?What is the image that dramatizes to the audience, that shows herRead more

    >>>in danger of losing her soul.

    Film is a visual medium. ?Which means that every element in a logline should invoke a visual image in the mind’s eye of a logline reader. What’s the visual for “in danger of losing her soul”? ?What is the image that dramatizes to the audience, that shows her soul in immortal peril?

    And how does his being disillusioned relate to her dramatic problem?

    And as a consequence of her predicament, what becomes his objective goal? ?What must he specifically do?

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  2. Posted: September 3, 2017In:

    When a star-struck young buck is forced to hide out in an off-grid commune to evade the police, using the identity he constructed to attain his anonymity allows him to win over the group, who decides to make him their new leader, even after he confesses to a past crime.

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    And then what? What is the specific dramatic problem created by this sequence of events? As a result, what must he do about the problem? ?IOW: what becomes his objective goal? Who opposes him? ?Who is his nemesis? What I see is a chain of events. ?What I don't see (yet) is a chain of causation thatRead more

    And then what?

    What is the specific dramatic problem created by this sequence of events?

    As a result, what must he do about the problem? ?IOW: what becomes his objective goal?

    Who opposes him? ?Who is his nemesis?

    What I see is a chain of events. ?What I don’t see (yet) is a chain of causation that creates a plot.

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  3. Posted: August 26, 2017In:

    After abandoning adoptive grandparents who later do not survive a crime he feels he instigated, a Texas senior must defeat hometown demons that follow him on his journey to find a place he can safely call home.

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    >>>a place he can call homeHow will he know when he's found a place he can call home? ?(Or thinks he can call home only to eventually realize....)?How will the audience know when he thinks he's found a place he can call home? IOW: what's the visual for his Biggest Dream?Film is a visual medRead more

    >>>a place he can call home

    How will he know when he’s found a place he can call home? ?(Or thinks he can call home only to eventually realize….)?How will the audience know when he thinks he’s found a place he can call home? IOW: what’s the visual for his Biggest Dream?

    Film is a visual medium. ?Which means there has to be a visual object a visualized event to every plot beat. ?What is the visual for “finding a place called home”? ?What does that scene look like?

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