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A young man with a dark past is trying everything to stay sane until the love of his life becomes unfaithful, he turns to the voices inside, can he quiet them or will the voices drive him to kill.
As Richiev said. ?He comes across, as a pathetic, passive victim of circumstances, first of the girl who dumped him, then the voices inside his head. ?The protagonist should be driving the story, but in this case, the story seems to be driving him..
As Richiev said. ?He comes across, as a pathetic, passive victim of circumstances, first of the girl who dumped him, then the voices inside his head. ?The protagonist should be driving the story, but in this case, the story seems to be driving him..
See lessAfter an intentional miscarriage a repressed wife succumbs to the machinations of a peculiar old couple, following them into a paranormal world where she must tame her darkest urges to win the control she desires.
I can see where guilt and depression resulting from the abortion would make her vulnerable to baleful influences. ?But "machinations" doesn't give me any idea of what these people have to offer that in desperation she would be attracted to as a remedy for what ails her. ?What is her objective goal tRead more
I can see where guilt and depression resulting from the abortion would make her vulnerable to baleful influences. ?But “machinations” doesn’t give me any idea of what these people have to offer that in desperation she would be attracted to as a remedy for what ails her. ?What is her objective goal that she thinks these people will help her achieve?
And, as noted, ?”darkest urges” is vague. ?What, specifically, are her darkest urges?
See lessA drug-addicted thief hatches a plot to steal a cure from Big Pharma mercenaries when his mother?s chemo loses funding.
What exactly is he going to steal? ?A sufficient batch of the cure for his mother's medical needs? ?Or the recipe, the formula for making it?Also, I would delete "mercenaries". ? You can insert the word into the dialogue of your protagonist and other characters, of course, but it isn't necessary forRead more
What exactly is he going to steal? ?A sufficient batch of the cure for his mother’s medical needs? ?Or the recipe, the formula for making it?
Also, I would delete “mercenaries”. ? You can insert the word into the dialogue of your protagonist and other characters, of course, but it isn’t necessary for the logline. The term “Big Pharma” connotes enough. ?From the plot alone we get it that you’re not feeling the love for the pharmaceutical industry.
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