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When an 11 year old accidentally clones himself, he is swept up in an audacious plot to kidnap world leaders and must use all his ingenuity to save his father, his friends, his unexpected twin and the world.
The aspect of the logline that hooks my attention is not the kidnapping conspiracy but the cloning. ?Cloning raises all kinds of ethical and existential fodder for a plot.But what is the cause-and-effect relationship between cloning humans and the kidnapping conspiracy? ?I'm guessing the conspiracyRead more
The aspect of the logline that hooks my attention is not the kidnapping conspiracy but the cloning. ?Cloning raises all kinds of ethical and existential fodder for a plot.
But what is the cause-and-effect relationship between cloning humans and the kidnapping conspiracy? ?I’m guessing the conspiracy is to kidnap and clone world leaders and then use the clones as replacement puppets to achieve world domination.
If the cloning is central to the conspiracy for world domination — if the cloning is the means to the villain’s ?objective goal — then I suggest the logline needs to clarify that causal relationship. ?If it isn’t, then I have no idea what the story is really about.
fwiw.
See lessA father seeks revenge on the internet troll who might have been responsible for his teenage son’s suicide.
>>>posses as an 16 year old girl on the internet to entice then trap the cyber bully And then what? ?What does the father intend to do after he has entrapped him? ? The posing is a means to ?his objective goal, but it is not his objective goal. ?The objective goal is what he wants to do oncRead more
>>>posses as an 16 year old girl on the internet to entice then trap the cyber bully
And then what? ?What does the father intend to do after he has entrapped him? ? The posing is a means to ?his objective goal, but it is not his objective goal. ?The objective goal is what he wants to do once he’s entrapped the troll.
Not that the logline should give away how the story will end. ?It should not reveal whether he succeeds or changes his mind. ?But it should indicate what he wants to do — his objective goal.
See lessA single mom, a recent college graduate, and a drifter each have a chance to make 1 out of 10 half court shots for $20 million or spend 2 years in jail.
The setup establishes the situation, but not a complete plot; ?for one thing, it needs an inciting incident: ?What happened to make these 3 people eligible for the contest? ?Why of all people on the earth are they the "lucky" 3?Also, the situation seems contrived to me ?That is, I can believe that oRead more
The setup establishes the situation, but not a complete plot; ?for one thing, it needs an inciting incident: ?What happened to make these 3 people eligible for the contest? ?Why of all people on the earth are they the “lucky” 3?
Also, the situation seems contrived to me ?That is, I can believe that one could win a big cash prize for scoring from the 1/2 court line — because that happens in the real world. But what kind of dramatic world do they live in that could impose such a?cruel, unusual punishment for failing? ?An arbitrary punishment that would illegal in (most of the) real world?
fwiw
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