1. Posted: April 6, 2016In:

    Finally a culmination of the book from the Page master, Bullwinkle the Moose, and Chip Foose have one hell of a time while stopping the evil Dr. Evil from taking over the world for the 6th time.

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    What Nir Shelter said. And the logline employees trademarked characters.? Which adds considerably to the?uncertainty and cost, making the concept a harder sell.

    What Nir Shelter said.

    And the logline employees trademarked characters.? Which adds considerably to the?uncertainty and cost, making the concept a harder sell.

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  2. Posted: April 6, 2016In:

    A serial killer taxi driver takes revenge on behalf of victimised passengers while trying to avoid detection.

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    dpg Singularity

    Anyone reading the logline will automatically think of "Taxi Driver", a tough act to follow.? And I'm not sure the concept as presented in the logline sufficiently differentiates it from that movie.? For example, that he? is driven by audio/visual delusions. Could the story be refocused to focus onRead more

    Anyone reading the logline will automatically think of “Taxi Driver”, a tough act to follow.? And I’m not sure the concept as presented in the logline sufficiently differentiates it from that movie.? For example, that he? is driven by audio/visual delusions.

    Could the story be refocused to focus on the cop as the protagonist pursuing a serial killer taxi driver? Maybe?update it to?a good-guy cop pursuing a serial killer?Uber driver?? No doubt, you’ll ?have to use a fictional name for the ride sharing service.? But it would have a more contemporary hook.

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  3. Posted: April 5, 2016In:

    Les harbours a secret obsession to become the next biggest gay porn star and when his Dad kicks him out, he escapes to LA. Trapped by his own narcissism it?s not long before he resorts to prostitution to feed a growing meth habit but when he witnesses his ex lover dying of an overdose he starts an unpredictable roller coaster ride to recovery that brings him to a practice of yoga and meditation and he attracts the man that gives him a new sense of purpose.

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    While we?need to know something about the main character, we don't need to know his name.? As a general rule, proper names should not be used in a logline.? So?"Les" doesn't?need to be in the logline.The logline seems to have a redemption/recovery arc.? However,? a logline should never give away theRead more

    While we?need to know something about the main character, we don’t need to know his name.? As a general rule, proper names should not be used in a logline.? So?”Les” doesn’t?need to be in the logline.

    The logline seems to have a redemption/recovery arc.? However,? a logline should never give away the turning point?or the ending as this one? does, how?he recovers from his fall in fortune and rebuilds a new life.

    So strip away those unnecessary?elements and what’s left?? Something like this: ?”After being kicked out by his father for being gay, a young man hitch hikes to L.A. to become a porn star only to end up as a male prostitute on the mean streets of Hollywood.”

    For myself, I find this rather formulaic certainly?when compared to the? neon-noir 2015 film “Tangerine”.?? The characters in that film?ring true because the main roles were cast with real life transsexual prostitutes hustling in Hollywood.? The plot of the film rings true to ?because it is based upon their real life experiences.

    But if you’ve done your research and dug up?a unique story about a ?compelling character, then more power to you.

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