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A brilliant but troubled Lawyer must let go of what is holding him back, save his son, and keep his family together.
Click on the "Training" option at the top of this web page for some helpful guidelines on writing a logline.
Click on the “Training” option at the top of this web page for some helpful guidelines on writing a logline.
See lessTo regain his status in the high ranks of the order after a shameful ban, an arrogant, yet talented sorcerer sets off to hunt one of the most vicious rebels in the realm.
>>>I wanted to use the word ?unexpericend? but I thought it was a bad ideaHow about "apprentice sorcerer"?>>This here is going to be a Golden Fleece,Okay -- but all we have to go on is the logline, and I see no hint of that in the logline. In a "Golden Fleece" story, the hero must teaRead more
>>>I wanted to use the word ?unexpericend? but I thought it was a bad idea
How about “apprentice sorcerer”?
>>This here is going to be a Golden Fleece,
Okay — but all we have to go on is the logline, and I see no hint of that in the logline. In a “Golden Fleece” story, the hero must team up and go on a dangerous journey?to obtain a valuable object. ?In your logline, the sorcerer is going after bad people — not a valuable object.
>>>rebel really has a cause,but that?s spoilers
A logline should advertise the strongest selling point — aka “hook”. ?What is it for this story? ?That the kid going after rebels or that’s he’s doing it for a cause?? What is the story really about? As Blake Snyder might?inquire (were he still in the land of living):?? Are you sure you’re not hiding the game ball?? (See “Saved the Cat! Strikes Back”, p11)
See lessFrom the moment Dae Stallard gets the unwanted news that his girlfriend is pregnant, the journey of a young, self-absorbed man becoming a flawed but loving father begins, ending with the high school graduation of his child.
The story seems to promise a series of snapshots over 18 years of a father and his family but no driving plot.? A "journey" is not a plot.? It can be what happens as a result of a plot, a character driven by an objective goal in spite of obstacles.? But?a journey can also be whatever?happens by justRead more
The story seems to promise a series of snapshots over 18 years of a father and his family but no driving plot.? A “journey” is not a plot.? It can be what happens as a result of a plot, a character driven by an objective goal in spite of obstacles.? But?a journey can also be whatever?happens by just drifting downstream in the river of life with no particular?goal in mind.
This logline brings to mind Richard Linklater’s “Boyhood”.? Well, if you have ?an established track record, industry contacts and a unique?story angle and a unique ?way of telling the story,?and independent financing?– all of which ?Richard Linklater had? with “Boyhood”, then you can make any film you want to with this premise.
But if you don’t, I don’t see anything in this logline that’s going to make?producers and directors eager to?want?to invest their time.? Or studios ?or ?folks on crowd sourcing web sites excited and intrigued enough to want to invest in the project.? The logline lacks a strong hook.
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