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  1. Posted: March 25, 2016In: Drama

    [REVISED] After attempting suicide, a depressed teenage girl yearns to live without fear of hurting herself but must learn to cope with the emotions that lead her to impulsive, dangerous, self-destructive decisions and actions.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on March 25, 2016 at 11:47 pm

    Unfortunately," learn to cope with the emotions?" is a subjective need more than an objective goal.? And it's internal.? Film's a visual medium.? What's the visual look like for those emotions that lead her to self-destructive acts?Meanwhile, the girl is in the midst of the most stressful, tumultuouRead more

    Unfortunately,” learn to cope with the emotions?” is a subjective need more than an objective goal.? And it’s internal.? Film’s a visual medium.? What’s the visual look like for those emotions that lead her to self-destructive acts?

    Meanwhile, the girl is in the midst of the most stressful, tumultuous period of her life — adolescence;??she has a cornucopia ?of external (visual) problems and issues she must deal with. any of which could trigger impulsive, dangerous and self-destructive decisions and actions.???Stifling parental supervision and rules,? pressures at school to make the grades and fit, identity crises,?peer?pressures to conform, the temptation of drugs and alcohol.? Beauty and body image issues. A boy friends who?is a ?bad influence.? Being dumped by a boy friend for another girl.

    ?And the ultimate social nightmare:?no one asks her to?the senior prom.

    So many?stresses and crises?could trigger another suicide attempt.? My suggestion: pick one.

    Pick one external problem or issue in the world outside her skull that she must?deal with — deal with by formulating?an objective goal that (she hopes) will resolve the problem.?? And frame a story and logline around that problem. (?With the implicit stakes being that failure to do so could trigger another suicide attempt.)

    If you haven’t seen it, I highly?recommend “Ordinary People”, one of the best movies ever made about a teenager coping with suicidal urges.??Critically acclaimed, a box-office hit, it won numerous awards including the Oscar for best screenplay adaptation. (By Alvin Sargent, one of the premier screenwriters of his generation.)? The plot concerns a teenage boy driven to suicide by one specific external tragedy in his young life, the death?of the his older brother in a boating accident.

    Anyway, I encourage you to keep digging.? There’s a lot of raw emotional ore to be mined?on the?topic.?

    fwiw

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  2. Posted: March 25, 2016In: Examples

    A medical student develops a serum to resurrect his dead fiancee only to fight for his life because she was resurrected from hell after being transformed into a demon. (29 words; THE LAZARUS EFFECT)

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on March 25, 2016 at 11:20 pm

    For me, the hook?isn't ?just that he can resurrect her.? An that he resurrects her from hell.? But that while there?she was transformed into a demon.His dream girl has become his worst nightmare.

    For me, the hook?isn’t ?just that he can resurrect her.? An that he resurrects her from hell.? But that while there?she was transformed into a demon.

    His dream girl has become his worst nightmare.

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  3. Posted: March 25, 2016In: Adventure

    ?In the desolate future, when a carefree and adventurous teenager is suddenly forced from his underground bunker into the world outside, he will have to mature quickly if he is to survive both the wilderness and the rogues that inhabit it.?

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    Added an answer on March 25, 2016 at 9:07 pm

    As the others have said.This story sets up a plot where the young man doesn't come out from the underground on his own initiative in quest of a specific objective goal..? He's pushed out? and he's gotta grow up fast if he's going to survive hostile forces.??But "to mature quickly " is?his subjectiveRead more

    As the others have said.

    This story sets up a plot where the young man doesn’t come out from the underground on his own initiative in quest of a specific objective goal..? He’s pushed out? and he’s gotta grow up fast if he’s going to survive hostile forces.??But “to mature quickly ” is?his subjective need — it doesn’t constitute a objective goal.

    And ” if he is to survive ” is only a maintenance goal; he’s reacting to a hostile environment .? Well, the main character can start out with only a maintenance goal, but?the plot proper kicks in?when something? happens –an inciting incident — that galvanizes him to? struggle for??something more than mere survival.? At that point he becomes a protagonist proactively pursuing a?specific objective goal.

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