1. Posted: December 15, 2015In:

    After his daughter is violently assaulted by an ice addict, a police chief secretly teams up with the head of a drug empire to modify the empire’s drug supply in order to sterilise drug addicts in exchange for protection from the law.

    dpg Singularity

    So, basically the story premise is that the police chief wants to sterilize addicts so they don't breed more drug addicts.? And the drug lord is too short-sighted to realize that by going along with the scheme he's trading short term protection for the long term loss of the next generation of potentRead more

    So, basically the story premise is that the police chief wants to sterilize addicts so they don’t breed more drug addicts.? And the drug lord is too short-sighted to realize that by going along with the scheme he’s trading short term protection for the long term loss of the next generation of potential drug users — he’s undercutting his own market.

    Okay…

    And then what happens?? As a result of this scheme, what jeopardy is the police chief (the protagonist) putting himself in?? What dramatic problem does it create?? What nemesis arises – who threatens to expose him and defeat his scheme?

    See less
    • 0
  2. Posted: December 14, 2015In:

    After the Grim Reaper has guided countless people to the Afterlife, a suitable replacement must don the cowl, so Death can finally rest in peace.

    Best Answer
    dpg Singularity

    Or the Grim Reaper and St. Peter could switch jobs.(And why not play it for comedy instead of drama?)

    Or the Grim Reaper and St. Peter could switch jobs.

    (And why not play it for comedy instead of drama?)

    See less
    • 0
  3. Posted: December 15, 2015In:

    After his daughter is violently assaulted by an ice addict, a police chief secretly teams up with the head of a drug empire to modify the empire’s drug supply in order to sterilise drug addicts in exchange for protection from the law.

    dpg Singularity

    I'm guessing that the police officer wants to sterilize addicts because the assailant was an addict.? And that the assault was a sexual assault.?That's the cause-and-effect relationship.? But I shouldn't have to guess the causal relationship between the attack and the sterilization conspiracy, it shRead more

    I’m guessing that the police officer wants to sterilize addicts because the assailant was an addict.? And that the assault was a sexual assault.?That’s the cause-and-effect relationship.? But I shouldn’t have to guess the causal relationship between the attack and the sterilization conspiracy, it should be clear from the logline.

    Also what, exactly, is the? “empire’s product”?

    I find it difficult to suspend disbelief that a single local?police officer so low?in the hierarchy can single-handedly protect the “head of a drug empire” from?the rest of police department, from?state and national drug agencies.? Or that a? head of a drug empire would think he could either.? (Others’ mileage may vary.)

    fwiw

    See less
    • 0