1. Posted: July 10, 2015In:

    When told to deliver a package to a vicious mob boss, a desperate young Christian woman steals a car and finds herself menaced by a deranged truck driver pursuing her car across country roads, forcing her to devise a plan that would save her and her little brother held by the mob boss from death

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    As noted, the logline seems to have two antagonists. And if the package is that important to the mob boss, why would he entrust it to her to deliver instead of a trusted, competent minion?

    As noted, the logline seems to have two antagonists. And if the package is that important to the mob boss, why would he entrust it to her to deliver instead of a trusted, competent minion?

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  2. Posted: July 7, 2015In:

    An IDF Lieutenant has terrible visions of the world’s destruction relating to the arrival of a man claiming to be the Messiah through unexplained miracles.

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    >>> coming of the Son of Perdition AKA the antichrist Then why aren't those terms in the logline? I am quite familiar with what the book of Revelations says, but I would never have figured out what your story is really about from the logline.

    >>> coming of the Son of Perdition AKA the antichrist

    Then why aren’t those terms in the logline? I am quite familiar with what the book of Revelations says, but I would never have figured out what your story is really about from the logline.

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  3. Posted: July 9, 2015In:

    After his older sister goes away on a business trip, a college dropout must take care of his hyperactive niece.

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    And then what? What complications ensues of dramatic and (I presume) comedic interest? This logline describes the situation for a plot -- but not a plot.

    And then what? What complications ensues of dramatic and (I presume) comedic interest? This logline describes the situation for a plot — but not a plot.

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