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When her favorite dream-streamer stops sharing his dreams, a rigid executive must help him dream again to win the contract of her life before her nightmares destroy her temper.
Everything Richiev said. The protagonist needs a clear cut, objective goal. And I am dubious that merely avoiding nightmares, recovering equilibrium makes the cut in terms of stakes big enough for an audience to care about, get emotionally invested in. My other concern is that she fundamentally hasRead more
Everything Richiev said. The protagonist needs a clear cut, objective goal. And I am dubious that merely avoiding nightmares, recovering equilibrium makes the cut in terms of stakes big enough for an audience to care about, get emotionally invested in.
My other concern is that she fundamentally has the wrong goal. She wants to reconstitute a dependent relationship on the dreamstreamer when what she really needs to do is develop the strength to dare to dream her own dreams, to live her own dream (and waking) life independent of the dreamstreamer.
That said, it’s an interesting concept. But I think it would benefit from re-focusing.
See lessAfter a dreamy adventurer returns to Greece, he faces his parents, who want to sell the beloved home of his grandparents, and only drain when he chooses their life as an obedient entrepreneur and desist from his own dreams to help as social worker people in need.
The revised version is still problematic in that it gives the main character two goals when a logline should only list one: 1] save the building; 2] retain his independent lifestyle. Furthermore, the two goals are not causally linked; the fate of one is not bound to the fate of the other. His parentRead more
The revised version is still problematic in that it gives the main character two goals when a logline should only list one: 1] save the building; 2] retain his independent lifestyle.
Furthermore, the two goals are not causally linked; the fate of one is not bound to the fate of the other. His parents could sell the building — but the main character could still retain his personal independence.
Finally, it’s difficult to understand why he cares — or why the audience should care — about his childhood home. If the home was so important to him, why has he been traveling around the world? Why didn’t he just stay home?
See lessAfter a dreamy adventurer returns to Greece, he faces his parents, who want to sell the beloved home of his grandparents, and only drain when he chooses their life as an obedient entrepreneur and desist from his own dreams to help as social worker people in need.
What you've outlined only constitutes a setup for a plot. What is the plot that follows as a result of the conflicting goals? IOW: what is he going to do about their threat? What becomes his objective goal?
What you’ve outlined only constitutes a setup for a plot. What is the plot that follows as a result of the conflicting goals? IOW: what is he going to do about their threat? What becomes his objective goal?
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