Alas, the logline for the concept is more confusing than ever. It seems to be a shotgun approach with the buckshot of goals and issues scattering all over the place. And I have no idea what “only drain when he chooses their life…” means.

The various iterations seem to revolve around one central problem, a home that’s been in the family for generations, that the main character wants to keep, but his parents want to sell. So I suggest refocusing the logline on only that problem. Why do the parents want to sell? Why does he want to keep it? What is his plan to solve the problem, raise the money or whatever, to keep it in the family?

And, btw, rather than “beloved home of his grandparents” I suggest “beloved ancestral home” — suggesting it’s been in the family for many, many generations. It’s a place that has so much family history associated with it; the main character’s psychological roots in the property go deep.