On the plus side, the main character is female and there are not enough of them in scripts.? And the main character is also a woman of a certain age other than an adolescent or a young adult. And they’re are not enough scripts about them either.

In a romance, there needs to be a seemingly insurmountable obstacle (as in “Romeo & Juliet”)? and/or a seemingly intractable wedge issue? (as in “Tender Mercies”) that threatens to sabotage the relationship.? Or love happens unintentionally while two people with seemingly incompatible personalities, clashing temperaments and agendas are forced to work together to solve a common problem (as in “One Fine Day”).

And I don’t see any of those dramatic configurations here.?? Well, almost none.? There is a hint of a compatibility issue in the sense that she has lived life in a frantic pursuit of material success, the bottom line, and he has live life in pursuit of artistic expression.? Perhaps he has taken time to stop and smell the flowers (or at least sing about them) and she hasn’t.? If that is the case, it needs to be highlighted.? Initially the disparity of their backgrounds and professional goals should be a source of conflict not romance.

Whatever.. It seems to me the logline needs to suggest a source of conflict, of ongoing dramatic tension between the two characters, not just between characters and their careers or whatever else they are dealing with in their lives.

Finally, the logline kind of gives away the ending? “rediscover the love that transcends all”.? That is something a logline should never do.? The outcome, particularly a happy-ever-after ending, should be in doubt.? The initial odds should be overwhelmingly not in favor of romantic success.