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  1. Posted: July 28, 2014In: Public

    Four Strangers meet in university, become best friends for two years, then one mistake finished everything.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on July 29, 2014 at 6:49 am

    Okay, but in your amplification of your logline, the focus seemed to be on the relationship between two girl best-friends, a relationship that gets complicated and finally destroyed by the guy. (Which would seem to make the guy the antagonist.) My primary concern about the logline is that it lacks aRead more

    Okay, but in your amplification of your logline, the focus seemed to be on the relationship between two girl best-friends, a relationship that gets complicated and finally destroyed by the guy. (Which would seem to make the guy the antagonist.)

    My primary concern about the logline is that it lacks a hook, something specific that immediately grabs my interest, that sets it apart from similar stories. “One mistake finished everything” is vague rather than specific. There are a 1,001 mistakes that can destroy a relationship. What is the specific mistake that sets this story apart from the 1,000 other stories where a mistake destroys a relationship?

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  2. Posted: July 28, 2014In: Public

    Four Strangers meet in university, become best friends for two years, then one mistake finished everything.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on July 29, 2014 at 6:49 am

    Okay, but in your amplification of your logline, the focus seemed to be on the relationship between two girl best-friends, a relationship that gets complicated and finally destroyed by the guy. (Which would seem to make the guy the antagonist.) My primary concern about the logline is that it lacks aRead more

    Okay, but in your amplification of your logline, the focus seemed to be on the relationship between two girl best-friends, a relationship that gets complicated and finally destroyed by the guy. (Which would seem to make the guy the antagonist.)

    My primary concern about the logline is that it lacks a hook, something specific that immediately grabs my interest, that sets it apart from similar stories. “One mistake finished everything” is vague rather than specific. There are a 1,001 mistakes that can destroy a relationship. What is the specific mistake that sets this story apart from the 1,000 other stories where a mistake destroys a relationship?

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  3. Posted: July 28, 2014In: Public

    Four Strangers meet in university, become best friends for two years, then one mistake finished everything.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on July 29, 2014 at 1:36 am

    So it's the story of the birth and death of some relationships? Who, among the four, stands out as the alpha-character, the protagonist who is the primary focus of the plot?

    So it’s the story of the birth and death of some relationships? Who, among the four, stands out as the alpha-character, the protagonist who is the primary focus of the plot?

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