1. Posted: September 12, 2013In:

    After reuniting with and marrying his childhood friend, an aspiring writer tries to build a normal life in the wake of getting dragged into the murder of an arsonist that killed his wife's father when they were kids, only to find that there is no "normal."

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    I count 3 candidates for the inciting incident: 1] the murder of father; 2] the murder of the arsonist; 3] The marriage to the woman. And the winner is...(?) What is the writer's objective goal? Who is the antagonist who opposes his achieving his objective goal? What are the stakes, what does he staRead more

    I count 3 candidates for the inciting incident: 1] the murder of father; 2] the murder of the arsonist; 3] The marriage to the woman. And the winner is…(?)

    What is the writer’s objective goal?
    Who is the antagonist who opposes his achieving his objective goal?
    What are the stakes, what does he stand to lose if he fails to achieve his objective goal?

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  2. Posted: September 10, 2013In:

    To get the girl of his dreams a timid momma?s boy must team up with the local cat burglar, but her unorthodox methods put more than his love life at risk.

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    Paul Clarke: What the others said. This seems to version 2.0 of a logline posted on June 13, 2013. It seems you have an itch you're trying to scratch around the plot conceit of a female cat burglar, but I can't figure out what it is.

    Paul Clarke:

    What the others said. This seems to version 2.0 of a logline posted on June 13, 2013. It seems you have an itch you’re trying to scratch around the plot conceit of a female cat burglar, but I can’t figure out what it is.

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  3. Posted: September 9, 2013In:

    When their covers are blown on a mission to seduce Yugoslav President Marshal Tito, a nebbish diplomat must smuggle Marilyn Monroe, the US?s biggest movie star and newest spy, out of Yugoslavia before their blunder leads to all-out war.

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    What nicholasandrewhalls said: What's the point of seducing Tito? The logline is built on a gimmick: Marilyn Monroe is a pawn in international intrigue. But what's the game plan? And what's in it for Marilyn? Why does the world's most famous actress need to turn tricks as a whore for the US governmeRead more

    What nicholasandrewhalls said: What’s the point of seducing Tito? The logline is built on a gimmick: Marilyn Monroe is a pawn in international intrigue. But what’s the game plan?

    And what’s in it for Marilyn? Why does the world’s most famous actress need to turn tricks as a whore for the US government?

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