1. Posted: April 15, 2013In:

    "When a smart and lonely charlatan is mockingly deceived by a criminal financier, she puts together a gang of female con-artists, to get the businessman’s financial empire to collapse."

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    Needs a grammar and word choice check. It's "gang of female con-artists", not "gang of female con-artist, and "the businessman's financial empire to collapse", not " the businessman financial empire to collapse''. First impression is that the protagonist being a charlatan doesn't make for a sympatheRead more

    Needs a grammar and word choice check. It’s “gang of female con-artists”, not “gang of female con-artist, and “the businessman’s financial empire to collapse”, not ” the businessman financial empire to collapse”.

    First impression is that the protagonist being a charlatan doesn’t make for a sympathetic character. The deception could be well-deserved comeuppance even if it was the act of a criminal.

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  2. Posted: March 24, 2013In:

    As a ranking officer battles to keep himself and his comrades alive and sane in the final months of the great war, a chance encounter with his lost love finally brings the truth of why she disappeared with their baby girl a decade ago and inspires him to try and rekindle the life together that was so prematurely taken from them.

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    K.I.S.S.= Keep It Simple Stupid. The logline is not only too long, but it is also too complicated.

    K.I.S.S.= Keep It Simple Stupid. The logline is not only too long, but it is also too complicated.

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  3. Posted: March 21, 2013In:

    A terrible storm tears apart a family moving their zoo across the ocean from Fiji to Australia, leaving youngest son Vilivo adrift at sea with only a dangerous Bengal tiger for company.

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    A knock off of the "Life of Pi".

    A knock off of the “Life of Pi”.

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