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After a NDE a social media executive weighted with the ability to see past lives and now tasked with healing her “soul family” uses her position to embed herself in the lives of those around her to circumvent karma that foreshadows current life situations that could tragically repeat past life patterns.
I had to pause for 10 seconds to decipher what NDE meant (Near Death Experience). That renders the logline DOA (Dead on Arrival), Every word must be immediately comprehensible and make sense. IMHO, karma as the core conceit of a drama series is a challenging sell in Occidental media markets. Since yRead more
I had to pause for 10 seconds to decipher what NDE meant (Near Death Experience). That renders the logline DOA (Dead on Arrival), Every word must be immediately comprehensible and make sense.
IMHO, karma as the core conceit of a drama series is a challenging sell in Occidental media markets. Since you are very passionate about the concept, I’m guessing you’ve brainstormed several story lines for episodes. I suggest a strategy of taking the story line you deem most viable, most compelling and rendering it as a script for a feature film. Leave the door open in the denouement for a sequel. In other words, write feature — think franchise.
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See lessWhen his dad threatens to cut him off financially, a bad boy rich kid must graduate his senior year at a strict prep school, only to fall for the principal’s daughter.
Yes, taking the current logline at face value, I don't get a sense of high stakes . Or serious jeopardy: It's not clear that the love interest is a major threat. Yes, she's a complication, but how is she a potentially fatal one? And if he threatens to embarrass his family, well, so what? They got moRead more
Yes, taking the current logline at face value, I don’t get a sense of high stakes .
Or serious jeopardy: It’s not clear that the love interest is a major threat. Yes, she’s a complication, but how is she a potentially fatal one?
And if he threatens to embarrass his family, well, so what? They got money. They’ll survive, even prosper.
What does his family stand to lose *materially* if he flunks out? What is their skin in the game (besides ego)?
And as I figure you know, it can be a point of pride to embarrass one’s parents, to subvert their plans and expectations.
Indeed, isn’t breaking free from parental authority, defying their expectations a *central theme* of the coming of age genre?
See lessUltimately, doesn’t he have to answer to his own expectations for himself, not theirs?
After their father was murdered, a gambler and his sister team up to take down a drug lord in their own hands in order for them to pay for their mother’s cancer treatment.
It's obvious they would want to take down the drug lord for revenge. But it's not obvious *how* they would profit from it, *how* they would get the money to pay for their mom's treatment. How exactly, do they plan to get the needed money? What does "take him down" entail? A heist of his loot? A conRead more
It’s obvious they would want to take down the drug lord for revenge. But it’s not obvious *how* they would profit from it, *how* they would get the money to pay for their mom’s treatment.
How exactly, do they plan to get the needed money? What does “take him down” entail? A heist of his loot? A con job? Or…?
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