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When his dad threatens to cut him off financially, a bad boy rich kid must graduate his senior year at a strict prep school, only to fall for the principal’s daughter.
2.5 cents more. Rather than have the protagonist being the over-privileged offspring of an over-privileged, entitled sugar daddy, why not make him the 1st generation college kid of struggling, barely middle class parents. Parents who are working 2 jobs and have 2nd mortgaged the house to the hilt inRead more
2.5 cents more.
Rather than have the protagonist being the over-privileged offspring of an over-privileged, entitled sugar daddy, why not make him the 1st generation college kid of struggling, barely middle class parents. Parents who are working 2 jobs and have 2nd mortgaged the house to the hilt in order for him to go to a prestigious university, get a foothold on the 1st step of the ladder of the American Dream — an opportunity they never had a chance to have, never will.
That exponentially amps up the stakes. Because if he drops out, then he’s not only ruined his own dreams, knee capped his own self-esteem, he’s dashed his parents dreams for him, ruined their lives. All their hopes, their dreams. all the hard earned money they have invested him are lost. That gives him a compelling reason to feel ashamed of himself (aka: dark hour of the soul), to have a compelling need to redeem himself, prove his worth to himself, to his family.
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See lessWhen his dad threatens to cut him off financially, a bad boy rich kid must graduate his senior year at a strict prep school, only to fall for the principal’s daughter.
Two points: 1] I have no problem with a mentor character who offers valuable help. Or a character (a guy, no less) asking for help. The mentor is a standard issue character in drama. It's the nature of the valuable help I am concerned about. Like, I have no problem with a story can where a mentor giRead more
Two points:
1] I have no problem with a mentor character who offers valuable help. Or a character (a guy, no less) asking for help. The mentor is a standard issue character in drama.
It’s the nature of the valuable help I am concerned about. Like, I have no problem with a story can where a mentor gives the protagonist some helpful hints on how to get the fish he needs (for the purpose of the plot). But I do have problems with a plot where the mentor gives the protagonist the fish he needs, or even gives him a fishing pole. Okay?
2] The subjective character arc is an important ingredient in a successful script. But it is extraneous to the purpose a logline. Loglines are about objective goals, not subjective needs.
You may be interested in the subjective character arc. Fine. But in a logline, movie makers are interested in the visual, in a thrilling action line to achieve a clearly defined, compelling objective, (concrete, material ) goal.
And right now I don’t see a thrilling action line toward a compelling objective goal.
My 2.5 cents worth.
See lessWhen his dad threatens to cut him off financially, a bad boy rich kid must graduate his senior year at a strict prep school, only to fall for the principal’s daughter.
Again, he gets a lucky break, he's dependent on someone else to succeed. The two greatest fortunes made by kids who went to Harvard where made by kids who dropped out -- Bill Gates and Mark Zuckerberg. They didn't need no stinkin' degree to salvage or buttress their self-esteem.
Again, he gets a lucky break, he’s dependent on someone else to succeed.
The two greatest fortunes made by kids who went to Harvard where made by kids who dropped out — Bill Gates and Mark Zuckerberg. They didn’t need no stinkin’ degree to salvage or buttress their self-esteem.
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