1. Posted: April 11, 2019In:

    After losing his daughter to a horrific incident a troubled rock star forms an unlikely bond with a neglected child , changing both of their lives forever.

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    >>> changing both of their lives forever.Will and Marcus form an unlikely bond in "About a Boy", changing both of their lives forever.Sally? and Harry form an unlikely bond in "When Harry Met Sally" , changing both of their lives forever.Annie and Alvey form an unlikely bond in "Annie Hall"Read more

    >>> changing both of their lives forever.

    Will and Marcus form an unlikely bond in “About a Boy”, changing both of their lives forever.
    Sally? and Harry form an unlikely bond in “When Harry Met Sally” , changing both of their lives forever.
    Annie and Alvey form an unlikely bond in “Annie Hall”, changing both of their lives forever.
    Lisbeth and Mikael form an unlikely bond in “The Girl with the Dragon Tattoo”, changing both of their lives forever.

    Change is a standard aspect of dramatic relationships.? What is of dramatic interest is not that the bond is some vague “unlikely” and? that their lives are “changed forever” in some undefined way.? A logline needs to be specific with the what and the how . What is unique about the bonding in this story, the “changed forever”? that differentiates it from all the other stories about relationships where two “Odd Couple” people bond and as a result their lives are “changed forever”?

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  2. Posted: April 10, 2019In: ,

    When their creator suddenly passes away, two sentient cyborgs must go against their programming and try to find a family for their creator’s son.

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    When their developer suddenly dies, two cyborgs must override their primary programming to find a family for the developer?s son.(20)Although I suggest a more interesting plot might be something like:When their developer suddenly dies, two military cyborgs must modify their primary programming and lRead more

    When their developer suddenly dies, two cyborgs must override their primary programming to find a family for the developer?s son.
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    Although I suggest a more interesting plot might be something like:

    When their developer suddenly dies, two military cyborgs must modify their primary programming and learn how to parent the developer?s son.

    But, if it’s already a done deal…

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  3. Posted: April 9, 2019In:

    In search of the ‘ultimate high’, a gang of high school misfits skip school set on finding an abandoned cannabis crop all while trying to evade a pair of obsessive truant officers.

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    Why would anyone abandon such a lucrative cash crop?And I? would think that the a more interesting dramatic problem and more interesting characters for the misfits to contend with would be the owners of the property.? And the jeopardy and stakes would be so much higher:? Getting caught by the truantRead more

    Why would anyone abandon such a lucrative cash crop?

    And I? would think that the a more interesting dramatic problem and more interesting characters for the misfits to contend with would be the owners of the property.? And the jeopardy and stakes would be so much higher:? Getting caught by the truant officers will only mean detention.? Getting caught by the pot growers could get them killed.

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