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  1. Posted: August 21, 2018In: Comedy

    When twin sisters contest to get young rich person, they face chaotic life.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on August 22, 2018 at 5:46 am

    Beki:>>>>can we make the guy the protagonistIt occurred to me to suggest that option in my last post but? I (uncharacteristically) restrained myself.? You can certainly go that way; it depends on the story you want to tell, on whose point of view you consider best suited for framing theRead more

    Beki:
    >>>>can we make the guy the protagonist

    It occurred to me to suggest that option in my last post but? I (uncharacteristically) restrained myself.? You can certainly go that way; it depends on the story you want to tell, on whose point of view you consider best suited for framing the plot? and what your intended denouement is.

    >>>?other twin start to revenge and deteriorate

    Revenge for what?? ?What did her sister do to deserve such treatment?? ?That’s a backstory event — not something to try to cram into a logline.? But if that’s the way you want to play out the relationship between the twins, you need to have a reason that will sell to an audience as to why one sister is justified to seek revenge on the other, to ruin her chance for love.? Otherwise, the avenging sister will come across as an unsympathetic character.?

    Have you considered the possibility that?the sabotaging twin is motivated by the conviction that it’s a bad match, that he is the wrong guy for her sister?? She engages in destructive behavior with the best of intentions.? So she’s not a rival, but a deflector.

    Are the women fraternal twins or identical twins — no small issue when it comes to casting the roles.

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  2. Posted: August 18, 2018In: Fantasy

    Forced to flee a city, an irresponsible young man finds himself standing up to sinister elements to save souls in a mysterious secluded town where no one is allowed to leave.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on August 22, 2018 at 1:09 am

    >>>only to discover his own was stolen years before.That's an interesting Big Reveal, but it seems to be a spoiler, something the protagonist discovers late in 2nd Act or in the 3rd Act.? ? A logline should never contain a spoiler.A late in the story Big Reveal, as dramatically interestingRead more

    >>>only to discover his own was stolen years before.

    That’s an interesting Big Reveal, but it seems to be a spoiler, something the protagonist discovers late in 2nd Act or in the 3rd Act.? ? A logline should never contain a spoiler.

    A late in the story Big Reveal, as dramatically interesting as it may be, doesn’t qualify as a story hook.? Why?? Because a story hook is a feature of the story that will attract and hold viewer interest? early on, in the 1st Act, in the 1st 30 minutes or so of the story — not later at the end of the 2nd? Act or in the beginning of the 3rd.? It’s an element that will be featured prominently in the trailers and teasers for the film.? Big Reveals can be hinted at in trailers and teasers– but they are never disclosed.? So they don’t belong in loglines either.

    As far as I understand the concept,? the story hook seems to be that for some reason folks are trapped by a mysterious force in a town, a force that is also killing them off one by one.

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  3. Posted: August 21, 2018In: Comedy

    When twin sisters contest to get young rich person, they face chaotic life.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on August 22, 2018 at 12:52 am

    >>>Ok, competing for the same guy is great but who?s the protagonist?In romances,? the standard practice is to triangulate relationships;? That is, there is a 1] protagonist who pursues a 2] love interest, but must compete with a 3] rival? for the love interest's affection.? (AKA the "BellaRead more

    >>>Ok, competing for the same guy is great but who?s the protagonist?

    In romances,? the standard practice is to triangulate relationships;? That is, there is a 1] protagonist who pursues a 2] love interest, but must compete with a 3] rival? for the love interest’s affection.? (AKA the “Bellamy” after the actor American Ralph Bellamy, who got type cast playing roles in romantic movies in which he was a nice-guy rival to the male lead but never the right guy for the gal.)

    In this case the sisters are rivals for the same guy.? Since, they are twins, the story seems to have dual and dueling protagonists, who are mirror characters of each other.? ?Which could lead to interesting complications.

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