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When a disillusioned married woman is absorbed by a surrealist painting, she struggles to develop the power to free herself from the painting before becoming part of it, while falling in love with a man of painting.
I , too, think the idea has potential, but what concerns me is that the more interesting story line goes unaddressed in the logline: the predicament of the woman.The man has a problem, and as the others said, it seems to be a simple one: find the painter.? Meanwhile,? the woman is surely on an advenRead more
I , too, think the idea has potential, but what concerns me is that the more interesting story line goes unaddressed in the logline: the predicament of the woman.
The man has a problem, and as the others said, it seems to be a simple one: find the painter.? Meanwhile,? the woman is surely on an adventure, a stranger in a strange new world. What dramatic problem does the situation create for her?? What danger is she in?
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>>>he is coercedIsn't it rather the case that he's manipulated?? How can she? coerce him via the internet?Also, I'm assuming this is a fictional story, not based on an actual terrorist.? If so, the story must compete with reality, with real life stories of? psychologically vulnerable youngRead more
>>>he is coerced
Isn’t it rather the case that he’s manipulated?? How can she? coerce him via the internet?
Also, I’m assuming this is a fictional story, not based on an actual terrorist.? If so, the story must compete with reality, with real life stories of? psychologically vulnerable young adults manipulated by internet propaganda? into? joining militant causes .? Truth is stranger than fiction — and more interesting and marketable.? Just saying.
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See lessThe Lord living under an alias tries to reconcile with his estranged daughter who is a member of SWAT, but kills to police officers in self defense and not only finds himself at war with a brutal police force, but his daughter and now the salvation of humanity hangs in the balance.
>>> fix the tech issues?Such as?The fundamental problem I have is that the premise of a JC who fights back rather than turn the other cheek is both a story hook -- and a story obstacle. It's an obstacle because it is diabolically and diametrically opposite to everything known and believed aRead more
>>> fix the tech issues?
Such as?
The fundamental problem I have is that the premise of a JC who fights back rather than turn the other cheek is both a story hook — and a story obstacle. It’s an obstacle because it is diabolically and diametrically opposite to everything known and believed about the religious figure.? The question dangling over the logline that goes begging for an answer is: WHY?? Why is he this way?? Why is a man who preached? — and practiced –non-violence acting violently?? (Why do you want to portray him that way?? Other than exploiting JC with a provocative twist to his character and teachings, what’s your point?)
And even? if I get past that obstacle, I still don’t get a connection between the the conflict and the stakes? It’s not logically obvious why all humanity gets in the crossfire of JC’s private war with the fuzz – -why their lives are at risk.
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