1. Posted: July 6, 2020In:

    When a lab accident makes him lose his sense of touch, a morally ambiguous top scientist must create a serum before he loses his other senses.

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    Agree with savinh0 and Mike Pedley. And suggest the logline should include a ticking clock to amp up the urgency. Like he has only 24 hours to develop a remedy before he loses all his senses and dies.

    Agree with savinh0 and Mike Pedley.

    And suggest the logline should include a ticking clock to amp up the urgency. Like he has only 24 hours to develop a remedy before he loses all his senses and dies.

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  2. Posted: July 5, 2020In:

    When a timid reef fish, discovers the world is about to be destroyed by a single ordinary human, he must find a way to stop them, and survive a treacherous journey to the surface world.

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    Agree with Mike Pedley. And one of the expectations of a film in the family genre is that the story is about a *family* situation. That's a prime ingredient to the secret sauce for Pixar movies, the primary conflict revolves around *family* life problems and relationships. There is not a clue as toRead more

    Agree with Mike Pedley.

    And one of the expectations of a film in the family genre is that the story is about a *family* situation. That’s a prime ingredient to the secret sauce for Pixar movies, the primary conflict revolves around *family* life problems and relationships. There is not a clue as to anything relating to family life in this logline.

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  3. Posted: July 2, 2020In:

    In the aftermath of a school shooting, the perpetrator’s loner best friend becomes a romantically involved with a popular girl who was injured in the incident. Their relationship is put to the test when he is forced to testify at an inquest that he had foreknowledge of the tragedy.

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    Michael Fine: I'm intrigued, but not clear on the concept. It's a no-brainer why the kid would -- or should -- be racked with guilt. But why does the girl suffer suffer survivor's guilt? Why should she? What is the emotional symmetry between his guilt and hers?

    Michael Fine:

    I’m intrigued, but not clear on the concept. It’s a no-brainer why the kid would — or should — be racked with guilt. But why does the girl suffer suffer survivor’s guilt? Why should she?

    What is the emotional symmetry between his guilt and hers?

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