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A bacheior must race against time to stop his apartment being invaded from a pair of talking cats.
The logline sets up a situation for a plot. But it doesn't deliver a plot. See the guidelines under "The Formula" at the top of the web page for guidelines on how to formulate a logline so that it includes a plot.
The logline sets up a situation for a plot. But it doesn’t deliver a plot. See the guidelines under “The Formula” at the top of the web page for guidelines on how to formulate a logline so that it includes a plot.
See lessA young black man accidentally travels to the past. He is decided to save his great-grandmother, a slave, with the help of her owner’s son
The setup constitutes an inverse deus ex machina plot gimmick. A regular deus ex machina is a contrived and convenient event that appears out of nowhere to resolve the plot in the last act. An inverse deus ex machina is a contrived and convenient event that comes out of nowhere to boot up the plot iRead more
The setup constitutes an inverse deus ex machina plot gimmick. A regular deus ex machina is a contrived and convenient event that appears out of nowhere to resolve the plot in the last act. An inverse deus ex machina is a contrived and convenient event that comes out of nowhere to boot up the plot in the 1st act.
And having the slave master’s son willing to help is a lucky break. A convenient coincidence. But in a properly worked out plot, the antagonist gets all the lucky breaks, all the convenient coincidences, the protagonist gets none. Zero. Zed. Zip. The good guys (and gals) must earn success the old fashion way.
A logline should describe major obstacles that threaten failure, not lucky breaks, boons, that ensure success.
A plot should be a conspiracy against the protagonist. This one seems to be a conspiracy against the antagonist.
See lessIn the aftermath of a school shooting, a victim’s non-athletic father who has given up on life finds meaning in coaching his dead son’s basketball team to the championships.
The logline gives away the 3rd Act, something a logline should never do. You say it's a weak team -- but not to worry, folks. The logline reveals -- in fact, guarantees -- he's going to take the team to a winning regular season, and then to victory in the regional playoffs and then upward and onwardRead more
The logline gives away the 3rd Act, something a logline should never do. You say it’s a weak team — but not to worry, folks. The logline reveals — in fact, guarantees — he’s going to take the team to a winning regular season, and then to victory in the regional playoffs and then upward and onward to championship game.
There’s no suspense in the logline about the arc of the plot.
>>By winning they see life can go on.
By losing they can also see that life will go on. That, IMHO, is a more important life lesson: resilience, grit.
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