1. Posted: July 10, 2020In:

    When a veteran intelligence officer, struggling to adjust to post-war life, begins to find secret codes everywhere she must follow the trail to satisfy her obsession. No matter how far that takes her.

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    What are the stakes? What does she gain by deciphering the codes? What will she lose if she doesn't.

    What are the stakes? What does she gain by deciphering the codes? What will she lose if she doesn’t.

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  2. Posted: July 2, 2020In:

    In the aftermath of a school shooting, the perpetrator’s loner best friend becomes a romantically involved with a popular girl who was injured in the incident. Their relationship is put to the test when he is forced to testify at an inquest that he had foreknowledge of the tragedy.

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    So he's too "insular" to notify the police of an impending mass murder. But he's not too "insular" to get romantically involved with a girl. And not just any girl; he, an outsider, has hookie up with an insider, one of the most popular girls in school. Sorry, I'm not buying that. I think your idea hRead more

    So he’s too “insular” to notify the police of an impending mass murder. But he’s not too “insular” to get romantically involved with a girl. And not just any girl; he, an outsider, has hookie up with an insider, one of the most popular girls in school.

    Sorry, I’m not buying that.

    I think your idea has the promise of exploring an interesting character dyad, but it seems like you’re still in the brainstorming stage. Keep brainstorming, best wishes with the story.

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  3. Posted: July 10, 2020In:

    When he learns his wife is planning to kill him, a rich man invites her secret lovers to a dinner party, and offers them each a fortune to kill her first.

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    An interesting idea, but suggest it needs vetting. Like, how can her lovers be a "secret" -- but he knows who they are so he can invite them to a dinner party? I suggest narrowing the focus down to a triangulation of characters: the rich guy and his philandering wife and her lover. Maybe something lRead more

    An interesting idea, but suggest it needs vetting.

    Like, how can her lovers be a “secret” — but he knows who they are so he can invite them to a dinner party?

    I suggest narrowing the focus down to a triangulation of characters: the rich guy and his philandering wife and her lover.

    Maybe something like:

    After he learns his unfaithful wife intends to kill him, a wealthy man offers a million dollars to her lover to kill her first. (24 words0

    Or mix it up: the wife offers to pay her lover to kill her husband — and then he counters with an equally lucrative reward for the lover to kill her.

    Or they both have lovers and both offer their lovers a $1 million to kill the other spouse. Who will collect first?

    Anyway, the premise can go down any one of several plot paths — which is a good sign.

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