Lost your password? Please enter your email address. You will receive a link and will create a new password via email.
Please briefly explain why you feel this question should be reported.
Please briefly explain why you feel this answer should be reported.
Please briefly explain why you feel this user should be reported.
When a young, restless girl runs away from her castle, she is stopped by her most trusted friend to find her castle is taken and her family is killed, now she must fight to take her kingdom back, unaware of the secrets that lie around her, starting with her most trusted friend.
>>>It is not a marketing lineBeg to differ,? It is a marketing line that targets a particular market, movie makers.>>>A Logline must summarise the story.Doesn't mean giving away the Big Reveal.? The summary should show that there are enough interesting things happening? in the 1stRead more
>>>It is not a marketing line
Beg to differ,? It is a marketing line that targets a particular market, movie makers.
>>>A Logline must summarise the story.
Doesn’t mean giving away the Big Reveal.? The summary should show that there are enough interesting things happening? in the 1st and 2nd Acts that will hook and hold attention until the Big Reveal.?
And a Big Reveal only works when it has been properly set up by events in the 1st and 2nd Acts.? Which setup I think could be developed more effectively in this logline.
See lessAn OCD-afflicted photog wins over an energetic creative through her awkward yet relentless affection, but as their relationship develops, it becomes too much.
>>My collaborator suggested ?A woman plagued by compulsion builds a relationship with a fiery creative using the very exactitude and devotion that threaten to wreck her.?Okay, how about her using her OCD to organize his chaotic life?? His tends to not plan ahead, to impulsively live in the momRead more
>>My collaborator suggested ?A woman plagued by compulsion builds a relationship with a fiery creative using the very exactitude and devotion that threaten to wreck her.?
Okay, how about her using her OCD to organize his chaotic life?? His tends to not plan ahead, to impulsively live in the moment. And it’s sabotaging his career, preventing him from fulfilling his Big Dream.
Can he be the photographer?? And?his impulsive behavior threatens to defeat him, to prevent him from getting ahead.? He has just landed the a photo shoot that could be his big break, enable to him to (finally) quit his day job and devote himself full time to his passion — and get paid well for it.
Whatever.? My point is? that he needs her desperately, urgently to organize his chaotic life.? Initially, their? relationship is a purely business — but then romantic and other complications ensue.
fwiw
See lessWhen a young, restless girl runs away from her castle, she is stopped by her most trusted friend to find her castle is taken and her family is killed, now she must fight to take her kingdom back, unaware of the secrets that lie around her, starting with her most trusted friend.
>>> Let them know how clever your big reveal is.Meanwhile, what is there in this story to keep a movie maker reading the script, a movie audience staying with the film long enough to get to the Big Reveal in the latter part of the 2nd Act or in Act 3?? ?My notion of a logline hook is what wRead more
>>> Let them know how clever your big reveal is.
Meanwhile, what is there in this story to keep a movie maker reading the script, a movie audience staying with the film long enough to get to the Big Reveal in the latter part of the 2nd Act or in Act 3?? ?
My notion of a logline hook is what will grab and holder reader and viewer attention in the 1st 30 pages/minutes — not in the last 30.? In the era of VOD when audiences are no longer captive in a theater, it’s more important than ever for a film to grab attention in the 1st Act.? If it doesn’t — click — audiences are going to tune in something else.? They aren’t going to wait for 60 to 90 minutes for the Big Reveal.
What is there in this plot that is going to hook and hold viewer attention in the 1st 30 minutes?
See less