1. Posted: February 19, 2018In:

    An OCD-afflicted photog wins over an energetic creative through her awkward yet relentless affection, but as their relationship develops, it becomes too much.

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    Good points and examples by Nir.A character who suffers from OCD at the beginning of a film will also suffer from it at the end no matter how the story ends? -- there's no character arc to be had on that character issue.? It's a cognitive disorder that a character cannot intentionally "overcome".? HRead more

    Good points and examples by Nir.

    A character who suffers from OCD at the beginning of a film will also suffer from it at the end no matter how the story ends? — there’s no character arc to be had on that character issue.? It’s a cognitive disorder that a character cannot intentionally “overcome”.? However, he may use his disorder to rationalize morally reprehensible behavior, to con others (and? himself) into excusing his? bad decisions.? And that rationalization/con is the raw material for a character arc.

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  2. Posted: February 20, 2018In:

    An old man lives alone in a cemetery , he just asks passenfers for a hug but nobody cares apart from some immigrants.

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    >>>Nobody lives in cemeteries, they are brought there after they die. Actually, they do in some countries. What country is this set in? Anyway, the logline sets up a situation for a plot but doesn't follow through with a complete set of the basic elements for a plot.? What is the inciting iRead more

    >>>Nobody lives in cemeteries, they are brought there after they die.

    Actually, they do in some countries. What country is this set in?

    Anyway, the logline sets up a situation for a plot but doesn’t follow through with a complete set of the basic elements for a plot.? What is the inciting incident?? And who is the protagonist, the old man or an immigrant?? What is the objective goal of the protagonist?

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  3. Posted: February 20, 2018In:

    After discovering the false promises of the corporation that raised him, a teenage super-genius is recruited in the fight to destroy the company at any cost. However, the peaceful leader of his new home challenges him to find another way, before it?s too late.

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    Based on iterations of the concept, I'm guessing you have an big ax to grind against BBC's - Big Bad Corporations.So do I.? But you gotta give me reason to also want to grind an ax vicariously through actions and character arc of the protagonist.? ?Unfortunately "false promises"? is a vague incitingRead more

    Based on iterations of the concept, I’m guessing you have an big ax to grind against BBC’s – Big Bad Corporations.

    So do I.? But you gotta give me reason to also want to grind an ax vicariously through actions and character arc of the protagonist.? ?Unfortunately “false promises”? is a vague inciting incident that doesn’t seem? justify his response nor engage my interest and sympathy.? Exactly what was so particularly evil about the lies he was told that motivated him to turn against this BBC?? What? specific injustice has he committed that dramatically justifies his intention to destroy the company and is likely to have an audience rooting for him to succeed?

    Furthermore, this version makes him a pawn of the revolutionaries:? “he is recruited by.”? Well, he might have been.? But ultimately, it’s his decision to joint the revolution? and the logline should be framed accordingly.? The protagonist should be proactive in joining the revolution, not a reactive pawn of others.

    >>> the peaceful leader of his new home challenges him

    Not sure it’s necessary for the purpose of a logline.? And again, it frames him as more as a reactive agent than as a proactive agent of his own dramatic destiny.

    fwiw

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