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  1. Posted: February 6, 2018In: Drama

    When it?s discovered that John Wilkes Booth didn?t die at Garrett’s farm, the disgraced bodyguard, who abandoned his post to protect Lincoln, teams with an arrogant but trusted Texas Ranger to hunt down Lincoln’s killer.

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    Added an answer on February 7, 2018 at 5:50 am

    Putting in the parking lot my own reservations about the credibility of unsubstantiated rumors about Booth as sufficient raw material to constitute a viable premise...>>>>teams with an arrogant but trusted Texas Ranger....?seems extraneous to the logline.? It's not the story hook.? The sRead more

    Putting in the parking lot my own reservations about the credibility of unsubstantiated rumors about Booth as sufficient raw material to constitute a viable premise…

    >>>>teams with an arrogant but trusted Texas Ranger….?

    seems extraneous to the logline.? It’s not the story hook.? The story hook is the redemption story:? the soldier needs to redeem himself, to atone for his colossal dereliction of duty.? I suggest trimming the logline to focus on the story hook.? ?It’s the redemption story that will sell the story, not teaming up with the Texas Ranger.

    Also, Texas was a Confederate state.? So why would a Texas Ranger help a Yankee apprehend a? man who acted on behalf of the “lost cause”? I’m not saying it’s not a credible character choice; rather that it’s an interesting one that will require some exposition.? (In that perspective, it seems to me that his being arrogant is inconsequential as a character flaw.)

    And a suggestion:? the protagonist will need funds to pursue John Wilkes Booth.? Who might be willing and able to underwrite his venture?? Why, of course, Edwin Booth, John Wilkes Booth’s older, brother, the greatest actor of his generation.? His motivation is obvious: he wants to salvage, if not redeem, the family name.?

    Hmm.? Could the inciting incident be Edwin approaching the disgraced soldier with the opportunity to redeem himself by hunting down his brother? (“The Call”)?

    fwiw

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  2. Posted: February 6, 2018In: Thriller

    When FBI agent went to Niger to investigate the death of four America soldiers killed Niger ambush, get into quagmire.

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    Added an answer on February 7, 2018 at 1:10 am

    Better to make him a father or brother of a victim, some one who has personal stakes.Or better yet, because it amps up the risk factor and difficulty, a mother or sister of a victim.Whatever, there also needs to be a motivation. The most obvious is that the protagonist thinks the official report isRead more

    Better to make him a father or brother of a victim, some one who has personal stakes.

    Or better yet, because it amps up the risk factor and difficulty, a mother or sister of a victim.

    Whatever, there also needs to be a motivation. The most obvious is that the protagonist thinks the official report is a coverup.

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  3. Posted: February 6, 2018In: Thriller

    When FBI agent went to Niger to investigate the death of four America soldiers killed Niger ambush, get into quagmire.

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    Added an answer on February 6, 2018 at 11:14 pm

    This is not a credible scenario.? An FBI agent wouldn't go to Niger.? FBI agents have no legal authority to work outside the United States,? ?Nor the expertise to investigate a military operation.The Defense Department and CIA do, and for darn sure they would be vigilant in defending their turf agaiRead more

    This is not a credible scenario.? An FBI agent wouldn’t go to Niger.? FBI agents have no legal authority to work outside the United States,? ?Nor the expertise to investigate a military operation.

    The Defense Department and CIA do, and for darn sure they would be vigilant in defending their turf against FBI meddling.? Just as the FBI is hyper-vigilant in defending its US turf against illegal meddling by the military and the CIA.

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