1. Posted: February 5, 2018In:

    The harsh realities of the Wild West challenges a New York marshal’s stoicism when he searches for a fugitive he must capture alive to earn a spot in the Secret Service.

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    Why not just establish him as? Secret Service rookie and this is his first assignment? I will forbear wading into the weeds of? how the concept needs to jive with the history of the service and merely point out that this version of the logline is all about him.? It has him acting to advance his ownRead more

    Why not just establish him as? Secret Service rookie and this is his first assignment?

    I will forbear wading into the weeds of? how the concept needs to jive with the history of the service and merely point out that this version of the logline is all about him.? It has him acting to advance his own career. His motivation is selfish.

    It would be better if his action were framed in terms of a greater good.? That the stakes are greater than just advancing his career prospects.? He would be a more likable character if his motivation were altruistic, for the sake of others.? What threat to society does the fugitive pose anyway?

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  2. Posted: February 5, 2018In:

    When an assassin whose mind is reformatted after every 72 hours falls for his latest target he will use his skills to take down those targeting her before his mind resets again.

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    Suggested:When an assassin whose mind is reformatted after every job falls in love with his latest target, he has 72 hours to save her life and his memories of her. (30 words)If this encapsulates your concept, then it is a movie I would definitely like to see.regards

    Suggested:

    When an assassin whose mind is reformatted after every job falls in love with his latest target, he has 72 hours to save her life and his memories of her.
    (30 words)

    If this encapsulates your concept, then it is a movie I would definitely like to see.

    regards

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    After World War II, twelve teenage German POW’s must clear a Danish beach of 45,000 landmines in order to go home.

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    how about gain their freedom?Well, yes, they wanted their freedom.... to go home.? Their specific objective goal was to be repatriated? to Germany, to go home. So...>>>If the war is over the POWs should have been returned, how were these POWs compelled?What most people outside Germany don'tRead more

    how about gain their freedom?

    Well, yes, they wanted their freedom…. to go home.? Their specific objective goal was to be repatriated? to Germany, to go home. So…

    >>>If the war is over the POWs should have been returned, how were these POWs compelled?

    What most people outside Germany don’t realize, or prefer to ignore, is that after WW2,? ?there was a great ethnic cleansing in Middle Europe.? Millions of innocent civilians in the German diaspora , who had lived for generations in Poland, Czechoslovakia, Ukraine, etc.? were expelled, forced? to move to what was left of Germany.

    In the Soviet Union, German POW’s were sent to labor camps in Siberia.? And most never returned.

    In Denmark, if the POW’s assigned to clearing the beaches wanted to eat, they had to defuse mines.? And they were Germans!? They did what they were told during the war — and after.? As I said,? this actually happened.?

    Compelling Germans to clear land mines was revenge, pay back for how the Germans treated the Danes during the war. (And settling scores going back to over 200 hundred years of territorial disputes with Germany.)? From the Danish point of view, what the Germans sowed in planting the landmines on the beaches, they now had to reap in terms of the hazardous work.? Pay back.

    >>>I wonder what else is standing in their way?

    Only millions of? Danes who hate Germans. This is established in the opening scene were the Danish sergeant assigned to supervise the young POW’s? brutally attacks them because he hates the very sight of them.? And other Danes just stand by and let him.? The message is clear to the POW’s and to the audience: nobody is going to defend the rights of the POW’s.? They are trapped in a hostile land and powerless.

    >>>The whole film can?t just be twelve teens clearing a beach for 110 minutes.
    Of course, there are complications, reversals, and character arcs, but the tension is sustained by the fact that the work is so damn dangerous.? In every scene where they are clearing mines, you know they could die at any moment.? And every 15-20 minutes, some one does.

    (spoiler alert)

    Only 2 boys out of the original group of 12 survive the ordeal.

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