A story featuring a Native American character — lesbian no less — is a good choice.? The character immediately stands out as? Native American characters of any sexual orientation, in any role in any story are few and far between.

However, I suggest the plot needs focusing.

First of all:
>>>this hour long

What is the targeted media outlet and format for this story?? Is it a one-off, or are you writing a pilot for a TV or streaming media series?? (The default length for comedy series is 30 minutes, for dramas 60.)

>>dramatic comedy

As Richiev said it’s not necessary to indicate the genre in the logline itself.? That will be indicated in a separate field in any database in which it is entered.? And you have to choose one: either it’s a comedy or it’s a drama.? ?The logline suggests more dark moments than light ones.? So if it’s a comedy, it’s a dark one.

>>>not only due to her sexuality

Redundant.? That’s she’s a lesbian implies the dramatic problem of not fitting into her native, traditional norms.

>>>but for having a child out of wedlock?

This? needs reworking.? If she’s a lesbian, then it’s not likely that she willingly had sex with a man. Although just because her primary preference is women, doesn’t not exclude the possibility. (A number of lesbians and gays are bisexual.)? But for the purpose of? a more compelling and motivating inciting incident, I suggest she should be fleeing after the complication of becoming pregnant after the traumatic experience of being raped.? And that the logline should more clearly indicated this to be the inciting incident.

So she flees to the big city.? Then what?? “Find refuge” is rather vague and passive.? The logline should state proactive choices she must make after fleeing.? Like keep the fetus or abort?? And if not abortion then how to support and raise her child herself?

There are a lot of roads this story can take — and that’s good; it is a concept ripe with possibilities.? Now you have to write a logline that indicates the initial road she must take given that she’s pregnant.

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>>>but problems ensue when she falls for the opposing candidate?

I think that for this to work,? her objective goal must directly — not obliquely — clash with her relationship.? And I suggest that a goal that would bring her into head on conflict with her love interest? is for her to be hired to go negative, to do opposition research and trash her love interest.

It’s also more realistic. Going negative is SOP in politics.? Alas, that has been demonstrated over and over to be the most effective way to campaign.? It’s not enough to polish one politician’s image; it is also necessary to trash the rival.

Therefore, to maximize conflict and comedy in the situation,? the objective goal given to her ought to be? to do negative research, to trash the rival.

And since there’s only a month to go until the election, it’s too late for her to credibly fall in love with him.? Better that they are already secret lovers when she’s hired.

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