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A city detective, who’s going through a mid-life crisis, is summoned to a small town where he’ll struggle to catch a serial killer, and where he’ll also face the chance to give his life meaning again.
Loglines are about what a protagonist intentionally strives to do -- objective goals.? They are? not? about what he??unintentionally or accidentally discovers along the way that conveniently solves a subjective problem.One reason this is so is because film is a visual medium.? Every action element oRead more
Loglines are about what a protagonist intentionally strives to do — objective goals.? They are? not? about what he??unintentionally or accidentally discovers along the way that conveniently solves a subjective problem.
One reason this is so is because film is a visual medium.? Every action element of a logline must be capable of being visualized.? The visual for catching the serial killer is obvious.? Either there is a final scene where the detective apprehends the serial murderer or kills him in the process.
But what’s the visual for an internal state of mind, for “giving his life meaning again”?
This is not to say that the script shouldn’t play out a scenario in which the protagonist solves his subjective problem while solving some objective problem.? Protagonists should have a character arc and solving a subjective problem entails a character arc.
But, again, the logline is about the action vector — not the character arc.
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As Richiev said. And please clarify what "becoming an alpha over suicide" means.
As Richiev said.
And please clarify what “becoming an alpha over suicide” means.
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Foxtrot25:Your take does flow better and is leaner at 18 words.? Although I'm? inclined to include an adjective to define the girl.? Maybe tenacious.? To signal that she's the protagonist -- not the Marshal she hires.? She doesn't remain down on the farm, plowing fields, herding the cattle while theRead more
Foxtrot25:
Your take does flow better and is leaner at 18 words.? Although I’m? inclined to include an adjective to define the girl.? Maybe tenacious.? To signal that she’s the protagonist — not the Marshal she hires.? She doesn’t remain down on the farm, plowing fields, herding the cattle while the Marshal undertakes all the jeopardy of venturing into dangerous territory.
Perhaps your version is good enough for a film with a story already has a? pre-sold story line in the form of a best-selling book.? But is it good enough for a script developed ex nihilo by an unknown, unproven, unconnected writer?? That’s the question on my mind every time I evaluate loglines for scripts already made into movies.
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