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When a foster care teen learns of his biological father’s death, he must undergo a mystic rite of passage to claim his inheritance. (23)
>>The evil dwarf-like creature appears and begins to torment the boy. As this character has appeared in severalof your loglines, I venture to surmise that you're looking for a plot vehicle in which to ?cast an evil dwarf. ?Why? What makes this character so dramatically interesting to you?
>>The evil dwarf-like creature appears and begins to torment the boy.
As this character has appeared in severalof your loglines, I venture to surmise that you’re looking for a plot vehicle in which to ?cast an evil dwarf. ?Why? What makes this character so dramatically interesting to you?
See lessA female bounty hunter holds a gangland bar hostage while awaiting the arrival of a fugitive killer but one of the hostages is hiding a deadly secret.
Kbfilmworks,I wholeheartedly agree that a pitch is ?a seduction, a strip tease. ?But it's got to flash enough skin, or at least deliver enough of bump and grind, ?to lure the mark in.This version doesn't flash enough skin, just doesn't have the bump and grind to lure me in. ?But different strokes foRead more
Kbfilmworks,
I wholeheartedly agree that a pitch is ?a seduction, a strip tease. ?But it’s got to flash enough skin, or at least deliver enough of bump and grind, ?to lure the mark in.
This version doesn’t flash enough skin, just doesn’t have the bump and grind to lure me in. ?But different strokes for different folks so maybe it will work for others. ?(Although I reiterate that your strip tease has to compete for attention with scores ?–hundreds? — of other loglines for the SciFi genre. )
Best wishes for this story.. Regards
See lessA female bounty hunter holds a gangland bar hostage while awaiting the arrival of a fugitive killer but one of the hostages is hiding a deadly secret.
You tag it as an action genre. ?But isn't it more accurate to pitch it as a SciFi? ?And if so, then what is the unique element, the organizing "magic" sci-fi feature of the story?Whatever, this version may sell the steak -- but I wonder if it sells the sizzle.And what's your theme? ?What idea are yoRead more
You tag it as an action genre. ?But isn’t it more accurate to pitch it as a SciFi? ?And if so, then what is the unique element, the organizing “magic” sci-fi feature of the story?
Whatever, this version may sell the steak — but I wonder if it sells the sizzle.
And what’s your theme? ?What idea are you exploring that requires her to be killing time in a gang bar while trying not to kill a doppelganger?
And ?if the bad dude can time trip, why can’t she? ?Wouldn’t it strengthen her appeal as ?a character, not to mention her arc and her relationship past and present with her prize game?
fwiw
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