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When he learns the one that got away is getting, a man sets about winning her back, with the help of the fiance’s ex, only to fall for her as well.
thedarkhorse:Based upon my incomplete understanding of the plot, my flawed perception is that the black sheep sister has more dramatic work to do after the MPR than the guy.All the guy has to do is stop being a total jerk, stop trying to sabotage the wedding, right?? But the black sheep sister mustRead more
thedarkhorse:
Based upon my incomplete understanding of the plot, my flawed perception is that the black sheep sister has more dramatic work to do after the MPR than the guy.
All the guy has to do is stop being a total jerk, stop trying to sabotage the wedding, right?? But the black sheep sister must not only stop trying to sabotage her sister’s wedding, she must also effect a reconciliation while concurrently resolving her own conflicted feelings about her sister.
And maybe the guy does, too, but don’t the bonds of family mean she has a deeper emotional and personal investment — stakes — in the outcome?? She’s embroiled emotionally in a family fight.
And per Aristotle’s dictum, the best tragedies, hence, drama occurs within families, between blood relations.? What deepens the tragedy in Romeo & Juliet is that it’s not just a conflict between two clans.? Their clandestine marriage puts Juliet on a collision course with her loyalty to her clan after Romeo slays her cousin Tybalt.? It also puts her on a collision course with her father’s demand that she marry the Prince.? (Women in those times were the currency for transacting alliances.)
There is no comparable collision course for Romeo within his clan.? Romeo initiates the plot, certainly, but in my book, Juliet ultimately has to make the more difficult dramatic choices.
But I digress.? It seems to me that the black sheep sister’s character arc is greater, and ergo, more dramatically compelling.
Again just saying, my 2.5 cents worth.
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thedarkhorse:Let me clarify my position (again);? I may like a premise -- but I may have questions or concerns about the execution of the premise.At this moment, based upon what you've explained, I'm confused.? You wrote:"With this logline, it?s the fact they are sisters... The sister is a disgracedRead more
thedarkhorse:
Let me clarify my position (again);? I may like a premise — but I may have questions or concerns about the execution of the premise.
At this moment, based upon what you’ve explained, I’m confused.? You wrote:
“With this logline, it?s the fact they are sisters… The sister is a disgraced child star. A black sheep. She?s trying to get back at her perfect sister “
Okay, so far so good. But then you wrote:
“? and [the black sheep sister] unexpectedly falls for this guy whilst she unexpectedly mends things with her sister.? The MP ? the sister?s dilemma, she realises she likes this guy”
Now I’m confused.? Who falls in love with who first??? Does the girl fall in love with the guy first?? Or does the guy with the girl first?? Do they both realize it at the same time?? Who owns the MPR? (Midpoint reversal) beat?
And, frankly, based upon what I understand the story to be about, the black sheep sister now seems to be a more interesting character than the guy.? One reason, is because she seems to have a more interesting dramatic dilemma.
Just saying.? One person’s opinion.
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thedarkhorse:I may like a story idea but still have concerns about how marketable it is in its current form.As I have said ad nauseam, I believe the single most important, make-or-break element in a logline is the story hook.? Of course, a well plotted story is necessary -- but, imho, it is not suffRead more
thedarkhorse:
I may like a story idea but still have concerns about how marketable it is in its current form.
As I have said ad nauseam, I believe the single most important, make-or-break element in a logline is the story hook.? Of course, a well plotted story is necessary — but, imho, it is not sufficient to close the deal, make the sale.? I believe that a plot also has to have a story hook, an intriguing, tantalizing, unique idea or a fresh twist on an old one.? It is a feature that can be stated in one clear, concise statement.
A clear, concise statement that can be instantly understood, that has immediate appeal.? A producer or director just gets it and likes it.? It doesn’t have to be explained; it just has to be stated.
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