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After his son is shot in a drive-by, a gangster must use his crippled werewolf abilities to kill the vengeful vampire who has been attacking his gang.
Now let me clarify my position: ?I always thought that a long term plot threat would be that the vampire could "turn" the son, not that she actually does in the inciting incident. >>> this vampire can survive in sunlight, though she is weakened. Hmm. I assume you've got a backstory explanatRead more
Now let me clarify my position: ?I always thought that a long term plot threat would be that the vampire could “turn” the son, not that she actually does in the inciting incident.
>>> this vampire can survive in sunlight, though she is weakened.
Hmm.
I assume you’ve got a backstory explanation why she gets to be different. ?I understand the situation you’re trying to set up, ?to rig the contest between the two so that initially the odds are overwhelming not in his favor. ?And that’s the dramatically correct thing to do, of course. ?But my first reaction is that giving her the ability to survive being exposed to sunlight is a tad too convenient for the sake of your plot.
>>>just stake her while sleeps
Easier said than done if she’s smart enough to be stay very well hidden AND his?powers are crippled. ? After all doesn’t “crippled powers” entail a diminished capacity to track down prey using the sensory powers of a wolf (superior smell and sight, for example)?
But there I go again, overthinking for a genre that requires a viewer to ?just accept on faith the conditions of the dramatic premise and enjoy the story.
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See lessAfter his son is shot in a drive-by, a gangster must use his crippled werewolf abilities to kill the vengeful vampire who has been attacking his gang.
>>>She doesn?t openly use her vampire powers in the middle of the day because of the aforementioned hush-hush nature of magicIsn't the conventional rule that vampires have to lie low in the day time because sunlight will kill them?IMHO: ?If you kill the son off at the beginning (for whateveRead more
>>>She doesn?t openly use her vampire powers in the middle of the day because of the aforementioned hush-hush nature of magic
Isn’t the conventional rule that vampires have to lie low in the day time because sunlight will kill them?
IMHO: ?If you kill the son off at the beginning (for whatever reason) the story loses a source of ever greater complications and dramatic tension, ongoing jeopardy and suspense. Keeping the son alive (maybe she tries to kill him but fails) ?gives the father something more –a lot more — to worry about, and?therefore, the audience a lot more to worry about. ?Other than his own life what greater threat does the vampire pose to him than the ongoing threat of her killing his son (or seducing him into becoming a vampire)?
I think the son is too good for the sake of the longer arc of the narrative to have him killed in the 1st Act.
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See lessQuestion: I suspect that most people here, like me, struggle to focus on the part of their story that’s important to logline. Mine is a complex of murders, mainly focused around concealing a galactic insurance fraud but including some revenge attempts by the contract killer. From MC’s perspective, there are multiple murders, a possible insurance fraud, the prime murderer is specifically after him and/or his family for revenge… Can people please suggest how to choose which elements/plot lines to logline and which to leave for the synopsis. e.g. in the movie “UP”, which is the more important: Carl reaching the Falls to fulfil his promise, Carl’s redemption, Carl speudo-adopting Russell.. etc.
Foxtrot25 has a good point. ?"While investigating insurance fraud..." isn't a exactly an inciting incident with a strong hook. ?So the logline should probably lead off with a murder since the bad guy (or one of them) is a contract killer. ?Complications and discoveries ensue.
Foxtrot25 has a good point. ?”While investigating insurance fraud…” isn’t a exactly an inciting incident with a strong hook. ?So the logline should probably lead off with a murder since the bad guy (or one of them) is a contract killer. ?Complications and discoveries ensue.
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