1. Posted: June 3, 2017In:

    A teenage Jewish boy in a Nazi death camp sets out to keep the promise of love with Hitler’s daughter and find the mystery of her who once tricked him as Jewish from the genocide.

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    I said it before, I'll say it again , the hook of the story is Hitler having an illicit daughter. ?IMHO, ?she ought to be the protagonist; the plot should be framed around her. Her romantic relationship with a Jewish boy would be a good plot complication, but I don't think see him as the story hookRead more

    I said it before, I’ll say it again , the hook of the story is Hitler having an illicit daughter. ?IMHO, ?she ought to be the protagonist; the plot should be framed around her. Her romantic relationship with a Jewish boy would be a good plot complication, but I don’t think see him as the story hook character; she is.

    My 2.5 cents worth.

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  2. Posted: June 3, 2017In:

    When a desperate Wisconsin farm wife invites WWII Nazi POWs to work the family orchard, she brings the war home.

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    Lucy:As I am sure you are well aware, many films depart from the characters and plot of the books they are adapted from. ?This is more than a matter of capricious creative license; ?it is also a matter of creative necessity as cinema is a different medium than print, with its own conventions and reqRead more

    Lucy:

    As I am sure you are well aware, many films depart from the characters and plot of the books they are adapted from. ?This is more than a matter of capricious creative license; ?it is also a matter of creative necessity as cinema is a different medium than print, with its own conventions and requirements. ?Including a more imperative commercial requirement: ?films require a substantially bigger investment of money than books, so in evaluating a book for adaptation, production companies give more weight to the question: what are the chances of the film being a commercial success?

    For the purpose of a logline, I’m guessing that the farm wife is the protagonist and the inciting incident is that she persuades her husband to take on some German POW’s as farm hands. (Despite her being strong-willed, he is the titular head of the family, is he not?) ?Complications ensue, but for the purpose of a logline, I’m guessing her objective goal is to employee the POW’s for only as long as it takes to harvest the summer crops.

    Complications ensue. ?But there is no space within the word constraints of a logline (25-30 words) to list them all. ?The logline can only state the primary obstacle or person that poses the greatest jeopardy to the protagonist achieving her objective goal. ?And I’m guessing that is her romantic entanglement with the POW. ?If that is the case, then that is how the logline needs to be framed.

    Also, the logline needs to suggest the stakes. ?So, come to find out, her husband wasn’t that emotionally attached to the orchard, the farm. ?What about her? ?What is her emotional bond to the land. ?Did she inherit it? ?Did she urge her husband to hire the POW’s because she’s desperate to hold on to land that is her heritage, in which she has planted deep emotional roots? ?What, besides a living, does the farm mean to her? ?The logline needs to suggest her emotional, as well as financial, stake in the farm.

    fwiw

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  3. Posted: June 3, 2017In:

    As a cops races against time to prevent another murder, his own, as he struggles to forgive himself against the misguided belief he?s liable for all these murders.

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    What the others have said. And "struggles to forgive himself..." relates to his subjective need. ?However critical it is to script, it is superfluous for the purpose of a logline. ?Loglines should focus on the struggle for an objective goal against an ?specific antagonist and/or a specific insurmounRead more

    What the others have said.

    And “struggles to forgive himself…” relates to his subjective need. ?However critical it is to script, it is superfluous for the purpose of a logline. ?Loglines should focus on the struggle for an objective goal against an ?specific antagonist and/or a specific insurmountable obstacle.

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