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When her main bread winner is fired, a maverick celebrity agent must battle her industry rivals and reinvent herself to save her business from impending financial ruin.
>>>main bread winnerTranslation: ?her major client (?)>>>celebrity agentTranslation: an actor's agent (?)>>is firedNot necessarily the end of the world for her client or herself. ?It's a crazy business with many vicissitudes. But what if he retires from the biz? ?Or dies?ButRead more
>>>main bread winner
Translation: ?her major client (?)
>>>celebrity agent
Translation: an actor’s agent (?)
>>is fired
Not necessarily the end of the world for her client or herself. ?It’s a crazy business with many vicissitudes. But what if he retires from the biz? ?Or dies?
But what really concerns me is whether this story is written from the pov of an outsider imagining how the business operates or from the pov of an insider who knows how the business operates.?
See lessWhen during a famine a loving Eskimo grandmother is abandoned by her migrating family, she reflects on her past life and faces death, which is inevitable. Or isn’t it?
How about:When an Eskimo grandmother is abandoned by her migrating family during a famine, she struggles to survive through a bitter winter until?the ?spring ?thaw. (20 words)The reminiscing can be part of the story, of course, but it's extraneous for the purpose of a logline. ?The purpose of a loglRead more
How about:
When an Eskimo grandmother is abandoned by her migrating family during a famine, she struggles to survive through a bitter winter until?the ?spring ?thaw.
(20 words)
The reminiscing can be part of the story, of course, but it’s extraneous for the purpose of a logline. ?The purpose of a logline is to pitch the hook of the plot. ?And in this case, the hook is the struggle of an old woman to survive after being abandoned — not whatever reminiscing she does in between efforts to stay alive.
And now that you’ve clarified your concept, I think it has the makings of a compelling film.
(And I don’t know what your thematic intention is, but the story would make a great vehicle to explore an important agenda that most films studiously avoid– coming to terms with one’s mortality. Studiously avoid as most films are based on scripts written by young people who don’t want to think about that, ?wouldn’t know how to think about it if they tried.
IMHO.)
fwiw
See lessWhen during a famine a loving Eskimo grandmother is abandoned by her migrating family, she reflects on her past life and faces death, which is inevitable. Or isn’t it?
The essence of drama is conflict, debate, struggle for a purpose, for a goal. ?The story in this logline begins after all that is?past: to wit, the conflict, debate and struggle by the grandmother to not be abandoned by her clan. ?All that remains is for an audience to watch her resign herself to heRead more
The essence of drama is conflict, debate, struggle for a purpose, for a goal. ?The story in this logline begins after all that is?past: to wit, the conflict, debate and struggle by the grandmother to not be abandoned by her clan. ?All that remains is for an audience to watch her resign herself to her demise and reminisce (presumably through flashbacks).
What’s the dramatic purpose of bypassing all the drama that led up to her being abandoned? ?What’s the drama — conflict, debate, and struggle for a goal — to be found in her reminisces?
On a minor technical note, a logline ?should imply a dramatic question, but it should never state one explicitly. ?So sentences like “Or isn’t it?” should not be used.
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