1. Posted: March 3, 2020In:

    A public defender doubles as a private dominatrix to support her family, but when a lonely, corrupt judge finds out she must sexually and emotionally satisfy a man with the power to ruin her life.

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    An interesting setup. But,.. what's her dramatic problem?? As long as she gives him what he wants -- no problem, right?Further if he avails himself of her kinky services, then she can blackmail or expose him.?? She likewise can ruin his life.So as I was saying, what's her dramatic problem?Also, theRead more

    An interesting setup. But,.. what’s her dramatic problem?? As long as she gives him what he wants — no problem, right?

    Further if he avails himself of her kinky services, then she can blackmail or expose him.?? She likewise can ruin his life.

    So as I was saying, what’s her dramatic problem?

    Also, the logline overlooks the most interesting aspect, the story hook:? their relationship.? In the courtroom, he dominates her.? In the backroom, she dominates him.

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  2. Posted: March 2, 2020In: , ,

    A total loser works for a ruthless Vegas casino boss to jinx gamblers. But after he falls in love with a cocktail waitress, gamblers become winners instead. Now he must save his Lady Luck from the boss’s murderous wrath.

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    A favorite film, but a challenging one to logline.I elected to break it up into 3 sentences because one l-o-n-g sentence is cumbersome, too hard to read.Setup, hook: A total loser works for a ruthless Vegas casino boss to jinx gamblers.Inciting incident, plot twist/reversal of fortune: But after heRead more

    A favorite film, but a challenging one to logline.

    I elected to break it up into 3 sentences because one l-o-n-g sentence is cumbersome, too hard to read.

    Setup, hook: A total loser works for a ruthless Vegas casino boss to jinx gamblers.

    Inciting incident, plot twist/reversal of fortune: But after he falls in love with a cocktail waitress, gamblers become winners instead.

    Objective goal and stakes: Now he must save his Lady Luck from the boss’s murderous wrath.

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  3. Posted: March 2, 2020In:

    A woman at a crossroads in her life finally decides to go see a therapist and discovers how the natural and the supernatural world collide.

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    >>how the natural and the supernatural world collide.The logline hides the game ball, how the natural and the supernatural collide.? So how do they collide?There have been innumerable films about a collision between the natural and supernatural. And more to come every year. ? What is unique abRead more

    >>how the natural and the supernatural world collide.

    The logline hides the game ball, how the natural and the supernatural collide.? So how do they collide?

    There have been innumerable films about a collision between the natural and supernatural. And more to come every year. ? What is unique about this story?? What? is a fresh take,? a new twist that makes this story different from? all the others?

    Also, what is the inciting incident?? What happened at the crossroads of her life that motivated her to see a shrink?

    And what is her objective goal?? As a result of discovering how the natural and supernatural are colliding, what must she do?

    And what are the stakes?? What threat does the collision pose?? What is lost if she doesn’t rise to the challenge the collision poses?

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