1. Posted: March 6, 2020In: ,

    After a plane crash strands him on a remote island, a hard-driving Fedex executive, who never had time for a personal life, now has all the time in the world to merely survive.

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    I liked the polarity of the theme of time:? he goes from not having enough time to having too much.His first priority is to merely survive.? Escaping comes years later, out of loneliness and desperation, and after he has acquired the rudimentary skills to build a raft.? (The biggest breakthrough inRead more

    I liked the polarity of the theme of time:? he goes from not having enough time to having too much.

    His first priority is to merely survive.? Escaping comes years later, out of loneliness and desperation, and after he has acquired the rudimentary skills to build a raft.? (The biggest breakthrough in the 1st 1/2 of Act 2 is the ‘simple task’ of building a fire.)

    What I particularly admire about the film is the last act.?? I would love to have been a fly on the wall in the meetings where the? studio suits demanded that the script have a happy Hollyweird ending.? A newbie couldn’t have won those arguments.? But the director and writer had the clout to prevail.? (Although, it took a number of rewrites for them to? figure out how to achieve some kind of closure.)

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  2. Posted: March 5, 2020In:

    A teenager must confront the father she put in prison before he wreacks havoc on her life and ruins her first chance at love.

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    As written, the logline seems to say that the father is still in prison. Which raises the question, how can he wreck her life from prison?? Or has he served his time and his now wrecking her life as a free man?Also how will confronting her father solve her problem??? That seems to be a weak, ineffecRead more

    As written, the logline seems to say that the father is still in prison. Which raises the question, how can he wreck her life from prison?? Or has he served his time and his now wrecking her life as a free man?

    Also how will confronting her father solve her problem??? That seems to be a weak, ineffectual response.? For one thing, it leaves the outcome of her dramatic problem in his hands.? Her happiness is dependent on his actions, his whims, his mood. Either he stops making her life miserable or he doesn’t.? She isn’t in control of her life and it seems to me her character arc is one where she finally takes control.? Which is to say, she takes control of the plot.? Because that’s the ultimate job of the protagonist.? The protagonist later or sooner becomes the character who is in the driver’s seat of the narrative.

    And that may her initial predicament, she’s one-down in the power relationship.? But? if he doesn’t stop, then what must she do? In what way can she, must she take control of her own life?

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  3. Posted: March 3, 2020In:

    In a grayscale world, a man gets obsessed with the window in his new room beyond which the world is colorful

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    variable: My personal litmus test for a logline with a good hook is that it that stimulates my imagination.? It invokes in my mind any number of ideas for scenes, action, dialogue.? Those ideas may be totally different than the story you have in mind.? But that's not what matters.? What matters is tRead more

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    My personal litmus test for a logline with a good hook is that it that stimulates my imagination.? It invokes in my mind any number of ideas for scenes, action, dialogue.? Those ideas may be totally different than the story you have in mind.? But that’s not what matters.? What matters is that it stimulates my imagination

    Your logline passes my litmus test.? Now I am curious to know how your imagination builds out the premise.

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