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Food is scarce, tragedies are many but the fight against human extinction becomes an arduous mission for mans earliest pioneers.
As the others have said. The logline presents a situation for a plot, but it doesn't present a specific plot. Check out the "Formula" topic link at the top of the web page for guidelines on composing an industry acceptable logline.
As the others have said. The logline presents a situation for a plot, but it doesn’t present a specific plot. Check out the “Formula” topic link at the top of the web page for guidelines on composing an industry acceptable logline.
See lessA sea otter living on Vancouver Island’s coast fears the ocean, but he hopes to overcome his fears from the help of friendly land creatures.
Rather than "hopes" -- the seat otter MUST overcome his fears. Or else . Or else what? What are the stakes. What does he stand to gain by overcoming his fear? What will he (and others) lose if he fails? What is his m.o. (action line) for overcoming his fear?
Rather than “hopes” — the seat otter MUST overcome his fears. Or else .
Or else what? What are the stakes. What does he stand to gain by overcoming his fear? What will he (and others) lose if he fails?
What is his m.o. (action line) for overcoming his fear?
See lessAn obnoxious hummingbird and her time-traveling hijinks must learn that her misdeed to others have cataclysmic consequences.
Loglines are about the action in the here and now, in the present tense of the story -- not the lesson to be learned... sometime... eventually. Why? Because the struggle stretching out 90-110 minutes is what sells tickets, not the lesson finally learned in a few seconds of insight and recognition inRead more
Loglines are about the action in the here and now, in the present tense of the story — not the lesson to be learned… sometime… eventually. Why? Because the struggle stretching out 90-110 minutes is what sells tickets, not the lesson finally learned in a few seconds of insight and recognition in the 90th minute.
The ongoing action line, not the momentary lesson beat, is what movie producers want to see in a logline.
And what does the bird want anyway? What is her specific objective goal that generates the hijinks? What is her specific character flaw (in a word or short phrase) that leads to its misdeeds?
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